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2islander2
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0 posted 2009-11-06 11:26 AM



The river said to me:
” Don’t listen to the people ”
they soiled all my reflections,
built by the wholesome cities,
the dams and the squalid bridges
above the natural clarities,
the river said to me:
” Do not listen to the people
” I have secrets and millenniums
which know birds and fishes
about the silvery dreams,
I shall say to you the spring
of all which breathes,
of what flows in me,
the madness of the nights
and the salmons who come to spawn in my waters,
the river said to me:
” Do not listen to the people.”
” they don’t know what they do,
neither of what they think,
nor what amazes them “,
” I know the clarity, the sky and the love ”
said to me the river.
” Do not listen to the people,
they don’t understand
that heaven ignores them”.

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Alison
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1 posted 2009-11-06 12:08 PM


yann,

Oh man.  I think this is your best yet - hard to say as you write differently from poem to poem.  I love this and I know Kacy will too.

xoxoxo
Alison

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2 posted 2009-11-06 01:11 PM


very different......I love it!
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3 posted 2009-11-06 01:21 PM


Deeply captivating, dear Yann! I love what your river whispers. He seems so confident in his own "resurrection". As long as there are people who care not everything will be lost. There is a greater power that will establish new equilibrium, to mend what has been ruined by human ignorance of Nature's value.

Thank you, dear Yann. This is precious!

Love,
Margherita

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4 posted 2009-11-06 02:12 PM


Jesus, Yann, I'm BLOWN away!

” I know the clarity, the sky and the love ”
said to me the river.
” Do not listen to the people,
they don’t understand
that heaven ignores them”.

passing shadows
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5 posted 2009-11-06 10:14 PM


this is very touching creative!
2islander2
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6 posted 2009-11-07 05:04 AM


dear Alison, your comment touched me and I appreciate the "reconnaissance" you give to my poem...

best wishes

yann

2islander2
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7 posted 2009-11-07 05:05 AM


thanks luminosity for reading and commenting py poem.
regards

yann

2islander2
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8 posted 2009-11-07 05:06 AM


thanks Margherita, your words mean a lot, I like the optimistic consideration of it, I hope you are right, may be the river will tell.

regards

yann

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9 posted 2009-11-07 05:07 AM


thanks a lot Martiniat for the warm and comforting comment.

best wishes

yann

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10 posted 2009-11-07 05:08 AM


Thanks PS for the supportive and kind comment.

regards

yann

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11 posted 2009-11-07 01:02 PM


Yann, I love and deeply understand your bond and conversation with the river.  

I really don't want to be anybody other than me, but if I was forced to choose to be another person, I would be the fictional Maya Doolittle, daughter of Dr Doolittle, both of whom talk to animals and understand each word when animals talk back to them.  

On second thoughts, I don't do too badly at talking to animals of all kinds and at understanding what they say, but it takes me a while longer to understand than it does Maya!  I even have a poem here somewhere in the archives called Conversation with a Burchell Zebra Foal and His Mamma.  

Please tell your river from me, that I try to promote conservation and anti-pollution as much as I can here in South Africa - and that I, too, understand and love the things it loves and that I don't do too well at understanding people.

Owl

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12 posted 2009-11-08 02:04 PM


Thanks Owl for what you say which is very important for me, I understand the fact to hear or talk to animals as a transcendance, something that enlights life and spirit...God bless you for protecting nature, I guess there is a lot of nature in south africa, so a lot to do.


best wishes

yann

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13 posted 2009-11-08 04:14 PM


This is mesmerizing... wonderful work!
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14 posted 2009-11-09 10:42 AM


You know I love this one, yann.
                            Ida

2islander2
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15 posted 2009-11-09 10:52 AM


thanks suthern for the supportive comment and read.

best wishes

yann

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16 posted 2009-11-09 10:53 AM


thanks Ida for the kind comment.

best wishes


yann

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17 posted 2009-11-09 05:30 PM


A cute story and I too have heard the river speak.I mean poems I've written about rivers. Thanks for the nice read.

AL Inmon

Kosmic888
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18 posted 2009-11-09 05:39 PM


This is a poignant piece, to say the least, and I like it. Nevertheless, I wasn't totally drawn into the river itself; the flow and pacing could be re-worked, what do you think. Again, a very good poem
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