Open Poetry #45 |
Maybe there's a misconception |
SlowlyFallAway Member
since 2008-08-29
Posts 279North Carolina |
He left flowers on my counter And notes posted upon my walls About how he loved me, he claimed he loved me Much more than anything With some exceptions That I now feel 'up against' But I still climb love's ladder Just with major setbacks Of times I felt so insecure And he left me there To crawl back on my own Promising he would never leave me Then disappearing for my hardest hours And not thinking twice, apparently Because somehow he manages to sleep by me And my tears keep only me awake Monday Nov. 2nd 2009 Emily Shives |
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rachaelfuchsberger
since 2007-02-21
Posts 609Las Vegas, NV |
This one hits home for me, because I was in a similar relationship with my ex-husband. Hence why he is now my EX. In any case, it is a hard thing to leave a relationship when you are attached to someone so much. My own personal experience ended in mental and emotional abuse, before I got out of that relationship. I hope yours doesn't go that far, and doesn't escalate to physical abuse. Goddess grant me the serenity to accept the things that I cannot change, the courage to change the things I can and the wisdom to know the difference. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Promising he would never leave me Then disappearing for my hardest hours While it's true that a friend in need is a friend indeed... someone who's consistently not there when needed most... is at best a roommate, not a partner. There's nothing lonelier than being alone while lying next to someone... and you've portrayed that pain so well! |
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AncientHippie Member
since 2009-10-15
Posts 411Surfing the Cosmic Flow |
Ouch, Emily. This is a tragic piece in the story that it tells. The beauty of it, however, is in the magic of the craft: reading it is like viewing a crystal ball by the light of a full moon. You just know that the future will be better. Go well Jim "We are stardust: we are golden: and we've got to get ourselves back to the garden." --Joni Mitchell "Woodstock" |
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GBride Senior Member
since 2009-07-02
Posts 538 |
"Much more than anything, with some exceptions." Very cleaver. This poem should be shouted from the rooftops of our small town. Maybe, you need to think about what it was that you saw in him that you liked in the beginning. A little exploration of your heart. Because many times people dump the one they are with, and then go out and get another just like the one they were with. Could it be, for instance, that you don't think you are worthy of respect? Lovely poem dear, I think it should go back up to the top of the list. |
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