Open Poetry #45 |
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Kosmic888 Junior Member
since 2009-11-01
Posts 29Vancouver Canada |
Like in a dream I allow myself to drift On an empty shore Then made to dance Alone, in solitude Led by the rhythm of a sacred verse Penned in the shadow of a rose Moist with morning dew Washing over me In wave upon wave Of honeysuckle fragrance And strawberry breath Whispering: “come, come deep in love’s warm passage where my flame will dissolve you in me and my kisses shall wash away the empty shores of ever feeling alone my love…” ©2008 'Diary Of A Pen Warrior' 'we are all connected by strings of light' |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Welcome to Passion In Poetry. It appears you bring a wealth of poetic knowledge with you, others will surly enjoy if they are asking for critique. This is a wonderfully written first posting. Please check your email for a welcome from us all here. |
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Kosmic888 Junior Member
since 2009-11-01
Posts 29Vancouver Canada |
Thanks for the kind words Mysteria.. I'm more than happy to critique the pieces I read. It always gives me great pleasure to communicate compassion and tolerance with others Peace Kosmic888 'we are all connected by strings of light' |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"Led by the rhythm of a sacred verse Penned in the shadow of a rose" Love that line, it is fragrant and melodic. Weclome to Pips! |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
lovely write! welcome to Pip! |
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rachaelfuchsberger
since 2007-02-21
Posts 609Las Vegas, NV |
Welcome to PiP. An excellent introductory piece! Goddess grant me the serenity to accept the things that I cannot change, the courage to change the things I can and the wisdom to know the difference. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Welcome to Passions! *S* I hope you enjoy it here. One thing to note, though... when you reply to a poem, there is a line right above the response box indicating if that poet encourages constructive critiques. The absence of that statement means the poet does not wish to be critiqued and their choice should be respected. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I love honeysuckle! Beautiful poem here. Makes me want to snuggle with my hubby. Welcome to PIP. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Very beautiful first entry! Elegant and romantic in my perception. Welcome to Pip, dear Kosmic888! Love, Margherita |
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