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thick richard and mr chin |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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 she was more the syrup girl kind than her mostly proper sister was sticky and always with that mischief on like mud on the knees from playing or bayou smells on her belly shimmer where she leaned into old cypress places and watched the voodoo man do his spells turning the slippery elm into medicine and making mudbugs grow big as hands doctor richard loved her forest fires when she got her urges all kindle heated and had him over to stir her embers down but on some saturdays in her smooth gown she would hunt for the makin' man's skin and take mr chin to her soul south mound where he read her poems she could moan to _______________ daark (of cajun wood) [This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (10-23-2009 06:24 AM).] |
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AncientHippie Member
since 2009-10-15
Posts 411Surfing the Cosmic Flow |
Good one, DS. There is a Truth to you bayou tale. Reading her poems she could moan to is Nirvana for poets. This one took me there. Sutra 8: Faith is not an alternative to thought: the one excludes the other. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
AH, thanks amigo...it is one of my favorite places to lose my way in.. |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
D- I could moan to that ~L |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
poems to moan to.... Oh, yeah! LOL Those who claim to not like poetry just haven't had it read right. *G* I couldn't see the pic... my computer's feeling uncooperative. *S* I'll have to save that treat for later. *G* |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms LG, I can imagine your moans are lovely, thanks ms ______________ ms suthern, it might be the adult content on your PC..it is a photo of me in my speedo and cowboy boots so it might be blocked..lol, thanks lady friend |
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Indigo Senior Member
since 2001-05-17
Posts 602 |
she got her some skin laissez les bon temps rouler! Mmm, with lagniappe, sha. Indigo |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
*s* thanks for pointing out the missing picture, Duh! D-How do I open adult content on my PC?~LOL~L |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms indi.. if you speak the french my respect for your fences disappears quickly |
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Bridget Shenachie Senior Member
since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056Kansas USA |
Enjoyed the walk in the woods--a new experience since I've never been to cajun country. You continue to woo us with your words. Swooning at your feet-- Shenachie |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
You know the best time I ever had was in a place called LaFayette, Louisiana at a Catfish Festival - I danced all night! Loved this as I could remember having poetry read to me just like this.  |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms Bridget, humble thanks ms ___________ JM, thanks so much amigo ______________ ms Myst..would have enjoyed seeing you there dancing your verve skin. thanks ms |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I want to hear her bedtime stories, I do. |
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MorningStar Member
since 2009-10-26
Posts 290Pittsburgh, Pa |
Woooie! Is it hot in here, or am I sweatin'?! Freakin fantastic. "Poems she could moan to"...Don't know 'bout her but I'm game! Aenea If I don't say it...who will? |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms ali-san, thanks little one __________ ms star..thanks for the fever ms |
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naturegirl Member
since 2009-09-30
Posts 168England |
i like the imagery. takes me away from cold wet england to a different world of steamy bayous and hot passions... |
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Kosmic888 Junior Member
since 2009-11-01
Posts 29Vancouver Canada |
I like this piece a lot.. evokes strong imagery, simile, and even stirred my sense of smell  - A suggestion if you don't mind. What would you think about using 'cast his spell' instead of 'doing his spell'? A new fan - Kosmic888 'we are all connected by strings of light' |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
naturegirl..thanks so much for the read and comment _____________ new fan Kos..thanks for the read..casting was not the intended application here..it suggest remoteness, doing is more hands on in application...welcome to the bluezoopip |
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