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Dreamer05
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since 2009-06-23
Posts 30
Kansas

0 posted 2009-10-29 05:43 PM


This is a brand spanking new piece of work that I wrote just this morning while at work. It just sort of came to me. And I'm not sure if the title fits, so please, let me know what you think. Anyway, here goes.
Perfect Life


When I wake up in the morning
and I see your smiling face
my heart flutters with joy
to know you are with me in this place.

But though it seems so magical
I really must confess
that something is dreadfully wrong.
What it is I can only guess.

The colors seem clearer
and the weather is just right.
A varitable paradise it seems
but its oh so very nice!

Is this heaven? Is this hell?
Will I miss my former life?
If it means being with you forever
then I'll gladly stay, no matter the price.

Come into my arms love
and let us tumble into bed.
I'm ready for some passionate loving
but you say to me instead,

"I do not love you
as you seem to think.
I'm a wolf in sheep's clothing
and you are a tasty treat."

My picture of paradise is shattered
as I run from your reaching arms.
I cry as I run
unable to be strong.

Soon the colors start to dull
and the weather becomes unbearable.
It seems I may be safe now
and this new place does not seem so terrible.

I wander around the land
searching for the meaning of my life.
No answers come to me
as the years pass me by.

Then one day
as I'm wandering this Earth
the clouds do part
a bright light coming forth.

A gentle, calming voice begins to speak,
"My child I am here for you.
I've always been by your side.
You know now what you must do."

Indeed I do know what it is I must do.
I put the past behind me, heading for the light.
A gentle peace surrounds me
and now begins my perfect life.


~Dreamer05~
October 29th, 2009


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Margherita
Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
1 posted 2009-10-30 12:01 PM


There are indeed those moments suspended in time, when we clearly perceive a radical change.

To be able to let go the past and its sorrows is the perfect premise for a perfect new life.

A very nicely written work, dear Dreamer!

Love,
Margherita

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast
2 posted 2009-10-30 12:34 PM


ms dreams..it is the only path to perfection they say..it is a pleasure to see you adorning it with your smile
Dreamer05
Junior Member
since 2009-06-23
Posts 30
Kansas
3 posted 2009-10-30 08:45 PM


Thank you Margherita and Dark. I appreciate the feedback and am glad that you enjoyed my poem. Have a lovely day!
nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
4 posted 2009-11-16 06:32 AM


I think the past is always there to remind us of what we had, and what could be in life...

M

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