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Perfect Life |
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Dreamer05 Junior Member
since 2009-06-23
Posts 30Kansas |
This is a brand spanking new piece of work that I wrote just this morning while at work. It just sort of came to me. And I'm not sure if the title fits, so please, let me know what you think. Anyway, here goes. Perfect Life When I wake up in the morning and I see your smiling face my heart flutters with joy to know you are with me in this place. But though it seems so magical I really must confess that something is dreadfully wrong. What it is I can only guess. The colors seem clearer and the weather is just right. A varitable paradise it seems but its oh so very nice! Is this heaven? Is this hell? Will I miss my former life? If it means being with you forever then I'll gladly stay, no matter the price. Come into my arms love and let us tumble into bed. I'm ready for some passionate loving but you say to me instead, "I do not love you as you seem to think. I'm a wolf in sheep's clothing and you are a tasty treat." My picture of paradise is shattered as I run from your reaching arms. I cry as I run unable to be strong. Soon the colors start to dull and the weather becomes unbearable. It seems I may be safe now and this new place does not seem so terrible. I wander around the land searching for the meaning of my life. No answers come to me as the years pass me by. Then one day as I'm wandering this Earth the clouds do part a bright light coming forth. A gentle, calming voice begins to speak, "My child I am here for you. I've always been by your side. You know now what you must do." Indeed I do know what it is I must do. I put the past behind me, heading for the light. A gentle peace surrounds me and now begins my perfect life. ~Dreamer05~ October 29th, 2009 |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
There are indeed those moments suspended in time, when we clearly perceive a radical change. To be able to let go the past and its sorrows is the perfect premise for a perfect new life. A very nicely written work, dear Dreamer! Love, Margherita |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms dreams..it is the only path to perfection they say..it is a pleasure to see you adorning it with your smile |
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Dreamer05 Junior Member
since 2009-06-23
Posts 30Kansas |
Thank you Margherita and Dark. I appreciate the feedback and am glad that you enjoyed my poem. Have a lovely day! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I think the past is always there to remind us of what we had, and what could be in life... M |
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