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elisalie16
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since 2006-07-12
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0 posted 2009-10-29 02:34 AM



I've been a thousand different people
in each town I was someone else
and it's hard to blend the scenes together to make one
I wandered streets
and got blocked in by cynderblocks
I was always either too naive or too smart for my own good
it flipped around between beds and pillows
Nothing stayed the same for
more than a few seconds, ever
but it always felt like years.
They're all separate lives
of new faces and names
with the same final number
but different voices at the connection.
It's a series of dreams and recollections
that just don't add up quite right in the end
and there's no recall button
so it's impossible to fill in the parts
that were missed or forgotten through black.

© Copyright 2009 Anne - All Rights Reserved
Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
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Eternity
1 posted 2009-10-29 08:07 AM


Dear Anne, this is very good work, you are aware of the multiplicity of your self. I would say though that all the experiences have been perfect and make your life "right" just the way it is. You live now and all that really counts is that you live to the fullest now.
Love,
Margherita

AncientHippie
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since 2009-10-15
Posts 411
Surfing the Cosmic Flow
2 posted 2009-10-29 08:51 AM


Hello, Anne.  I am starting to sense the emerging philosophy here, and strongly agree with Margherita that developing your focus on the Now is paramount.  I would also add the caveat that you not use the past as the past; rather use the present you that is distilled from that past.  Metaphysical, I know, but that's the way I see it.  I like your work very much.
Namaste
Jim

"We are stardust:  we are golden:  and we've got to get ourselves back to the garden."  --Joni Mitchell "Woodstock"

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