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Don’t Read This Poem
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Don’t Read This Poem |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere 
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Don’t Read This Poem Just let your eyes Slip softly over My smile Play catch The twinkle in my eye Laugh your way along my lines Linger Spend some time With me Let me touch you Wherever You please Don’t Just Read This Poem [This message has been edited by Lori Grosser Rhoden (10-15-2009 07:29 AM).] |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Laugh you way love the thought of your poem...perhaps you meant laugh your way?  M |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms LG..fun concept..don't suppose you wrote it on your skin? |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
lol why not? I've written many of poems like these why shouldn't they read them? |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
nakdthoughts- bless your heart- good eye- gonna have to break down and buy Word my Works is killing me here. ~L |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
D-I sweat ink~L |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
martiniat8 Don’t JUST Read This Poem  |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
I disobeyed, and read this poem. |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
thanks! now go back and do more than JUST read lol ~L |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
ah, JUST! you should have put more emphasis on that word, so it stand out strong, like you showed me in all caps, I think I missed it or read it wrong, and leaving it out of the title made me miss it too. now it reads completely different. REALLY good |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
Any suggestions besides JUST reading? |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
C G-Use that sweet imagination you write from. You JUST read a news paper or phone book. You let me touch you (where ever you please) or you wouldn't have responded- thanks |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
martiniat8 Glad you really liked it Thanks for "getting it" ~L |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
LOL... I love this! *S* |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Thanks, *S*! ~L |
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Bob K Member Elite
since 2007-11-03
Posts 4208 |
Dear LGR, I thought you might enjoy this poem by Donald Justice. http://www.poemhunter.com/poem/poem-4/ Your poem reminded me of it a bit. I liked the playfulness and the sense of fun that I've seen in the two or three of your things I've happened upon so far, and the sense that you don't wander too far away from the theme that you're playing with. The reasonable concreteness and avoidance of abstraction is something I prize as well. Keep on going. Best wishes, Bob Kaven |
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Bob K Member Elite
since 2007-11-03
Posts 4208 |
I also wanted to say that you have a sense of ending, and that it seems clear that you work in that direction through the length of that poem, which gives more of a sense of unity than one usually finds here. You should be very pleased. |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Lori, I stopped to read this poem the word DON"T invited me. My eyes skipped across the lines, and stopped to take in your smile. I caught that twinkle in your eye and sent a wink your way. I laughed as I let you touch as I'm ticklish you know. I read the poem and stopped to say, thank you for the fun sent my way. latearrival |
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AncientHippie Member
since 2009-10-15
Posts 411Surfing the Cosmic Flow |
Lori, I held off reading this poem for days, out of respect for the title. Finally, however, I had to peek. What a vivid and sensitive work! Thank you. Jim Sutra 6: If your Path seems to be sprinkled with shards of glass, you should examine each shard to ensure it is not a diamond. |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Bob K, latearrival and as always AncientHippie,I am blown away by your responses to my work. You have Sunshine to thank for me bringing it here. Thank you all very, very much ~L |
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Bridget Shenachie Senior Member
since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056Kansas USA |
Practicing all sorts of civil disobedience here--so sue me, jail me whatever...I just read your poem and JUST got it. I do enjoy your humor. Sometimes, my friend, I think that you are the poet that I always wanted to be. It's an honor and a pleasure to read your work. Shenachie |
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MorningStar Member
since 2009-10-26
Posts 290Pittsburgh, Pa |
Oops. I read it. It couldn't help it - it's like tearing off the "Do Not Remove" tag on a pillow! That's right I did it! And I loved every minute of it! Aenea |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Shenachie-it is you who is the Poet of organized disipline and knowlege I always wanted to be~L |
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