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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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 mistress of silk and metal solutions the tattoo man weaves pores into portraits his ends are the pricking steps of dancers on a moan song sea where footprints are rain some other hemingway has his afternoons catching last breaths in the steal gray smoke then licking the centers out with tongues that speak only vulgar anthem lyricocities that pray to the prey of seldom sunday mornings so often nailed on new timber for a worshiping and then breakfast before target practice shopping for rich man's dreams in a down pour and would her god bless her in horizontal windows ______________ daark (of cajun wood)(art by ds) |
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Tweet45 New Member
since 2009-10-15
Posts 7 |
Very nice. I love your style of writing as well. Enjoyed this very much. |
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AncientHippie Member
since 2009-10-15
Posts 411Surfing the Cosmic Flow |
Once again, DS, you have presented a burnished portrait, with rust showing at the edges. This picture comes with its own world-weary baggage: tired, but determined to keep on keepin' on. I really like the phrase "some other hemingway has his afternoons catching last breaths in the steal gray smoke" - As always, DS, your visuals are almost overwhelming, in their dark, tired primal colours, depicting sad and lonely people, each one a story that you tell so well. Namaste Sutra 4: Do not expect your Path to be smooth. It will have rocks, slippery portions, and parts that are washed away completely. Persevere. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I like the whole... but that first verse is pure magic... and has me in its spell. *S* |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
D-you never cease to amaze.......~L |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Tweet, thank you so much _______________ AH, humble thanks my friend.. _______________ ms suthern, thank you for the eyes _________________ ms LG I am pleased to amaze..thanks so much |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
My lord! Did you do that painting? It is spectacular DS, not to mention the poem it sits upon. Any more art to share somewhere? I absolutely love the sum of the parts that make this presentation. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms myst..it is a photo I took actually that I reconstructed through some layering..thanks lady, I appreciate your eyes on both words and glass |
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playing.with.crayons Member
since 2006-01-02
Posts 362Neverland |
What a fine piece of artistry you have created here DS. I am speechless... and if you knew me, you'd know that's near impossible to achieve  So I take my hat off to you. This write is a champion of free verse. Really. I love the way you spun in so delicately other poetic devices, just to make the poem even more fascinating. Much enjoyed! ~Cheye and he said "little blackbird, take this letter to her" |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Cheye.. thank you so much |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
nice hombre, I like it. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
YB...humble thanks amigo |
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