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Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

0 posted 2009-10-19 11:51 PM

Dawn found
Doe eyed carcass entrails
Splayed upon a back road
For a witches read
Swearing as much
‘bout the broken bike as
What he still can‘ t believe
Eyes playing tricks
Mind wandered off
Maybe
No way did he see
No
Couldn’t be
A woman was there
Big dark eyes
Long golden warm
Brown hair
Only
A wisp of white
She wore
Gently
Into the
Break of day

[This message has been edited by Lori Grosser Rhoden (10-20-2009 02:56 PM).]

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

1 posted 2009-10-20 12:39 PM

Only
A wisp of white
She wore
Gently
Into the
Break of day

Beautiful imagery, loved this.

Sláinte mhaith!
Mysteria

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

2 posted 2009-10-20 07:12 AM

he asked if she was game, she nodded, so he shot her, from the hunter..sorry couldn't resist adding some redneck to your romanticia

AncientHippie
Member

since 2009-10-15

Posts 411
Surfing the Cosmic Flow

3 posted 2009-10-20 08:32 AM

Evocative and symbolic in its simplicity, this gentle, magical piece transforms the disgust of wanton slaughter into a metaphor for sharing our world with all the wondrous creatures who are our neighbours.
Jim

Sutra 5: Public self-criticism does not brighten one’s Spark of Brahman: it merely feeds one’s narcissism.
Jim's Guide to Enlightenment: The Comple

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

4 posted 2009-10-20 02:10 PM

Mysteria
Glad you liked it, thanks for letting me know~L

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

5 posted 2009-10-20 02:11 PM

AH-you are most generous~L

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

6 posted 2009-10-20 02:12 PM

D-
You're killing me here! LOL ~L

Bridget Shenachie
Senior Member

since 2002-01-23

Posts 1056
Kansas USA

7 posted 2009-10-28 10:18 PM

Ah--the deer are so hard to see--especially after dark--that it is dangerous to be out on the road at night. It does seem that they have a tendency to jump the wrong way.

Shenachie

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