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young_blood
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0 posted 2009-10-19 11:37 AM


She transfers a bee's waste
to the lips of her lover,
cool and sweet to the taste
as he passes to another.
Honey and menthol linger
as quiet repair begins,
Maybe he got the stinger
in the handshake of a friend.

© Copyright 2009 Alex Lewis - All Rights Reserved
AncientHippie
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Surfing the Cosmic Flow
1 posted 2009-10-19 12:36 PM


Nice bit of craft here, youngblood.  Succinct and sardonic, with a feel of "what goes round, comes round" to it.  Thank you.

Sutra 4: Do not expect your Path to be smooth.  It will have rocks, slippery portions, and parts that are washed away completely.  Persevere.

young_blood
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2 posted 2009-10-19 12:46 PM


Thanks for reading and commenting. I'm just getting back into writing after a long while.
rachaelfuchsberger
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3 posted 2009-10-19 04:04 PM


I like your style. The dark cynicism is actually refreshing.

Arana Darkwolf

young_blood
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4 posted 2009-10-19 04:22 PM


Much appreciated.
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