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Open Poetry #45

Cat Nap

martiniat8
Senior Member

since 2003-06-21

Posts 897
Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic

0 posted 2009-10-15 06:50 AM

We don't always know
where we go

when these lids
have closed

and our eyes shut tight

in a blind
two hour ride

then
opened wide

before dawn's
early rise

to the bed's
cold moon

like a one night lover

that has left too soon

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

1 posted 2009-10-15 02:48 PM

very smooth~~

M

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

2 posted 2009-10-19 08:33 AM

I like this very much... especially the ending. *S*

The term "cat nap" makes me smile... I have 2 kitties... and they're championship snoozers! LOL

Chalmette Guy
Senior Member

since 2009-03-11

Posts 1257
Louisiana

3 posted 2009-10-19 10:48 AM

I like the thoughts of where this took me Brad. Cool stuff.

AncientHippie
Member

since 2009-10-15

Posts 411
Surfing the Cosmic Flow

4 posted 2009-10-19 12:40 PM

Perfect. Amazing how such a brief piece can say so much. I like the visual form of this poem: it gives a wispy look on the page, much like the fading remnants of a dream you can't quite recall. Good work.

Sutra 4: Do not expect your Path to be smooth. It will have rocks, slippery portions, and parts that are washed away completely. Persevere.

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

5 posted 2009-10-19 02:05 PM

I love the poem, the notion of uncertainty in riding and loving, in french we talk about errance. nice work.

yann

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