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Open Poetry #45

Woman On the Train

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

0 posted 2009-10-14 07:44 PM

Woman On to Train

She could be one of the most
beautiful women in this world,
and if she should be
why should I care,
for I have already been there,
making choices based almost entirely
on the outer beauty that women possess,
not considering where that would take me.
Alas, I must confess
to a dreary world of disappointments,
a land of suffering consequences.
Still I could not take
my eyes from her.
If only she would stop
smiling at me so radiantly,
and simply be on her way,
before I find the words to say
to the woman on the train.

JamesLee
09 October
2009

shalisadefa
Member

since 2009-08-13

Posts 114

1 posted 2009-10-14 08:12 PM

You know James, from your reads I'm profiling you as a fun guy, enjoying life to the fullest, appreciating all experiences big and small - especially the small ones.

True or false?

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

2 posted 2009-10-15 06:21 PM

Thank you Shalisadefa for the nice response...perhaps...I was trying to speak of the disappointment that sometimes come to a man that is captivated by beauty without considering the consequences...James

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

3 posted 2009-10-16 12:24 PM

This had a haunting ethereal effect when I read it James...wonderful, cognitive write my friend very much relished by this one.

Jimmy

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

4 posted 2009-10-19 05:42 AM

loved this one of yours James!

Bisous de Sydney
RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

AncientHippie
Member

since 2009-10-15

Posts 411
Surfing the Cosmic Flow

5 posted 2009-10-19 08:18 AM

A bittersweet work here, James. One has the sense of something almost ready to happen, until the siren voice of experience closes that door. Nicely done.

Sutra 4: Do not expect your Path to be smooth. It will have rocks, slippery portions, and parts that are washed away completely. Persevere.

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