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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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Autumn rains poured from the heavens lining the sky in silk shades of gray. The clouds waltzed in silence to faraway music caught up with indifferent winds. As the curtain fell from the sky and tears of the heart welled and caught my breath. Skipping through the pain and promise slipping sideways through transparent sheets isolating my sorrow in warm pockets of rain. |
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unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477 |
The clouds waltzed in silence to faraway music caught up with indifferent winds. That's just gorgeous. L, H |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Rain's something we've had much of in the last few weeks...even my son, in Riverside, Calif., where it NEVER rains is getting rain...Love it... Much enjoyed this my friend, j. |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
Awwwwwwe, you've described the rains so well. They truly do have a special way of bringing about the melancholy. Anyway, we've just had our first rains here and I haven't had that much time to really meditate upon them, yet, but, after reading your poem, I have gained some inspiration. Well, at least, to get out and skip around a bit. Smiles. God bless, Love, and Light, -Bob |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"Skipping through the pain and promise slipping sideways through transparent sheets isolating my sorrow in warm pockets of rain." beautifully written, as always, Lori. We are getting the October 40 degree rains that may turn into snow this week~~ too cold, too soon for me.  M |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms bluezy...you should have been out riding in it...grin..enjoyed your art babe |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
WOW! This is really good. It would actually fit really well in a chain poem/short story I'm working on called "The Brrr, The Gray". Would you like to be included it? |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
'They' say that indifference is the opposite of love. That's what I am reminded of in this poem somehow. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
isolating my sorrow in warm pockets of rain. Beautiful write, Bluesy... I especially love the last line! *S* |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
this is really really good, the images and metaphor of the rain pouring are excellent, enjoyed a lot. yann |
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Namyh Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988 |
Blues Serenade - I'm reminded of rain mixed with tears while walking the streets of New York wet by water blown by those indifferent winds as Spanish and Jamaican music filter between the droplets. Hadn't thought of that in years and the effect afterwards that seemed to cleanse the soul and its streets and its air. Thanks for the memories Blues Serenade. Namyh |
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Alwye
Moderator
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Oh my...absolutely stunning imagery. I particularly liked the phrase "warm pockets of rain." |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
I enjoyed this, it conveys a sense of moving to me. Loved the last verse. "A spring shower was cause to run |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I love how you shared those warm pockets of rain. Well done, poet lady. A |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thanks so much everybody. Gosh, you're all so kind and I appreciate you taking the time for me. Big hugs all around! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Lori, you sing the blues like no other! You could serenade me into forever more... Sending a warm, autumnal hug of love, Linda  |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Bluesy - a warm rain to surround ones thoughts. A nice touch and another great writing... BC |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
The imagery here is exceptionally rich and this poem will linger in my mind as it is hauntingly beautiful, dear Lori. Love, Margherita |
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rachaelfuchsberger
since 2007-02-21
Posts 609Las Vegas, NV |
Sometimes I wish crying was that easy. Arana Darkwolf |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thanks so much you guys, you really know how to put a smile on my face and I thank you for your nice replies. It means a great to to me, truly! |
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