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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere 
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in canonized moments under benediction of darkness around moonlit corners love, follow me unbidden along hedgerow asylum down paths of perdition into this shanty chapel on well-paved intentions through my torn citadel over crumbling abaculus beside baptismal waters upon blessed tabernacle in upper rooms hidden among heralded talismans to my altar of incense an unorthodox sacrament within covenant forbidden against prophet’s testament and let us worship there until we reach redemption somewhere south of eden . |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
I'll return the favor and just smile  |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
brad does that mean you like it? |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
I should ask you the same thing :-D I'll tell if you do :-P |
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N|D|N|C|Lost-Poet Member
since 2009-07-30
Posts 360New Orleans |
Beautifully captured. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
This is the sort of poem that always appeals to me... a little romance, a little mystery and the recognized thoughts of a seeker. Ida |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms browneyes...demonized with just a squirt of sinful syrup and suggestion. enjoyed it |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
Delightfully delicious. Somewhere, south of eden is where I lie. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
and let us worship there until we reach redemption somewhere south of eden I really like this! *S* Wonderful write! |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
brad..I always like your stuff..I told you that poet..always love your 'beautifully captured's Ida..thank you, I always love when you pop in lady D..I'll admit I'm a bit warped from my religious upbringing..God understands jer..so you won't need directions then? thank you suthern..I'm appreciating you appreciating me..thanks, girl thanks for your comments..made me smile today shel |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
I didn't just like it, I loved it, and I would follow you through hell and back, but NOT so sure about the asylum. ;-) an exciting read to be sure! In fact it may be my fave of yours, but I still like the romantic ones, that make me swoon. :-P The images, the faith, everything just hits me to the core. VERY exciting. for sure! PS Let's here it for the South Side!!!! What What??? |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
wow brad you are very trusting..and don't be afraid of the asylum, it was meant in the refuge sort of way I don't know that I've ever made anyone swoon before thanks |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
hello Shellie, this is flowing as a river, the words are surprising and create an harmony, a strange one full of effect and light. thanks for the well written poem yann |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
yann I know..the images may be a little shocking to some I really am a good girl..well, at least salvagable I think thanks |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
hearted this one with all of my I. Paul I love my dog, and my truck. It's that simple, really. |
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N|D|N|C|Lost-Poet Member
since 2009-07-30
Posts 360New Orleans |
lol thanks for making me laugh brneyedgrly. I write 'Beautifully Captured' because it is what it says. You captured the feeling quite beautifully and I cannot think of any combination of words to express that then those two. Well, that and 'Wonderfully Trapped' But- That one just doesn't sound too complimenting. |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
paul thanks for the piece of your heart this will probably make you blush, but I want to say in public that of the few guys I have talked to on here, you are one of the most chivalrous, respectful and kind souls I have met..a true gentleman and that says a lot for your age..thanks for being true shel ____________ poet I am glad I made you laugh and your 'beautifully captured's always make me smile.. keep writing..I enjoy it |
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N|D|N|C|Lost-Poet Member
since 2009-07-30
Posts 360New Orleans |
Since I can't figure out how to PM you... Would you happen to have any artists you'd like to share? I've been looking for more of a Soul-Sound. I can't remember the names of any of the songs I have stuck in my head though, or the artists. And while I'm on topic. (Sarcasm) Is "South" Of Eden hold any significance? |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
NDNC, looking for Soul? Try watching the movie The Commitments, or listen to the 2 different soundtrack cd's. Wilson Picket, James Brown, Aretha Franklin, Otis Redding, they did covers for the movie. Andrew Strong, the lead singer from the movie band, still sings soul too. The Blues Brothers sing/sang a lot of soul too. Erika Badu (sp?) and always, ALWAYS, Ray Charles! |
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