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Open Poetry #45

An Unfrozen Heart

Namyh
Senior Member

since 2009-01-20

Posts 988

0 posted 2009-10-12 09:34 PM

An Unfrozen Heart

Inflexible, intractable, even adamantine
is an ice chiseled heart's refrigerated sunshine,
chilling its warmth to freeze its rays
to block Love's penetrating singeing blaze.

If gloom within such heart does loom
as an unlived mansion with unlit rooms,
then one ray of Love's illumined heat
will unleash hot breaths of Life's light beat,
deicing, defrosting floors and doors
of this mansion's wind frozen corridors.

Then gloom can't rest in Life's light heart.
There's no room left from end to start.
For the heart demands now light displays
of Love's penetrating singeing blaze.

Namyh

brneyedgrly
Senior Member

since 2009-06-08

Posts 1125
nowhere and everywhere

1 posted 2009-10-12 10:16 PM

I like your style

I particularly liked this line:

is an ice chiseled heart's refrigerated sunshine,

enjoyed

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

2 posted 2009-10-14 07:48 PM

deicing, defrosting floors and doors
of this mansion's wind frozen corridors.

Then gloom can't rest in Life's light heart.
There's no room left from end to start.
For the heart demands now light displays
of Love's penetrating singeing blaze.

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There is just so much to like about this.

I am so glad I scrolled down.....What a fabulous poem.
I love your upbeat attitude and the entire thaw.

Enjoyed, very much!

Namyh
Senior Member

since 2009-01-20

Posts 988

3 posted 2009-10-14 09:00 PM

brneyedgrly – I am so very happy you liked this. You should have seen the rewrites which your enjoyment says were worth it. Thanks a lot. Namyh

Namyh
Senior Member

since 2009-01-20

Posts 988

4 posted 2009-10-14 09:01 PM

Blues Serenade - Sometimes it takes an upbeat attitude to thaw out the rigors of our day which makes me so very happy that your scroll down was working. I am so very honored this put a fabulous in your day. Namyh

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