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Blinding Light |
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larzana Member
since 2009-09-17
Posts 55 |
If love is blind, and ignorance is bliss, then how am I aware that I feel so despaired? If I can’t see the light, and I don’t know the truth, how do I know that I shouldn’t love you? The me you see isn’t really me, as the me I know isn’t what we’d all like it to be. The reason I gather through the blissful dark of my wake, is what I’d like to give you, you just will not take. |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Larzana... I enjoyed this very much.. my only constructive critique if I may would be to set it out in stanzas.. it would read better.. but no matter if you don't, I still enjoyed it  Bisous de Paris RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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larzana Member
since 2009-09-17
Posts 55 |
Thank you. I'm not completely sure I understand what you mean...is this right? If love is blind, and ignorance is bliss, then how am I aware that I feel so despaired? If I can’t see the light, and I don’t know the truth, how do I know that I shouldn’t love you? The me you see isn’t really me, as the me I know isn’t what we’d all like it to be. The reason I gather through the blissful dark of my wake, is what I’d like to give you, you just will not take. |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
If love is blind and ignorance is bliss then how am I aware that I feel so despaired If I can’t see the light and I don’t know the truth how do I know that I shouldn’t love you The me you see isn’t really me as the me I know isn’t what we’d all like it to be. The reason I gather through the blissful dark of my wake is what I’d like to give you you just will not take Here, this is what I mean.. of course it is your preference on how you present your beautiful work.. I look forward to reading much more of you Bisous de Paris RDB xx Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Welcome To Pip!!!!  ARCTIC WIND |
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larzana Member
since 2009-09-17
Posts 55 |
Oh wow, that does look alot better! Thanks!  Everyone here is so nice. I feel welcome. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome to PiP, Larzana. Please check your email for a Very Special Greeting! " It matters not this distance now " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
welcome to passions enjoyed |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Hi Larzana, Welcome to PiP. It's going to be fun to read more of your poetry. Have fun and just enjoy your time here. Alison |
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anniepimm54 Member
since 2009-09-03
Posts 110 |
Welcome to PiP, Larzana. Loved the poem and everyone here is always so lovely and helpful Annie  |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
A Big Welcome Hug~ A Very insightful and truthful poem! ~ARH  |
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