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brneyedgrly
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0 posted 2009-09-14 10:13 PM



the lines are all
muddled

tear-smeared
illegible
this dismissal

ledges crumbled

stone-puddled
riddles
whispering

and I am brittle

stumbling
on trestle
in thistle

dwindling
bone-whittled

fumbling
I pause
and listen

for rustle
of your

pennywhistle
.

(hiatus)

© Copyright 2009 shellie - All Rights Reserved
Earth Angel
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1 posted 2009-09-14 10:35 PM


Images, thoughts, and feelings tumbling down the page ~ and I was tumbling along with them.

My dear ss, the only tears that should ever fall from your beautiful brown eyes, are tears of joy.

This poem aches ~ and I felt every word. I can hear the tinny sound of the pennywhistle blowing as I was reading...

I am sending a big, warm hug your way,
Love,
Linda

brneyedgrly
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2 posted 2009-09-14 10:50 PM



thanks lindy

it was a rough time




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3 posted 2009-09-14 11:45 PM


Splendid writing, Shellie.  Yes, it aches - but you wrote so well that I was right with you, aching.

Love,
A

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4 posted 2009-09-15 12:08 PM


http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IbUl_E-R91Q&feature=fvw

Always a song to cheer up those in need.

Beautifully captured.

brneyedgrly
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5 posted 2009-09-15 12:27 PM



poet

thanks for this cool bobby hebb jam..never heard it before but enjoyed it very much!

thank you..who can not smile after that

Oklahoma Rose
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6 posted 2009-09-15 12:41 PM


Awwww, this is so sad, Shellie. i do hope things get better for you.
Margherita
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7 posted 2009-09-15 04:19 AM


Dear Shellie, you just made me open my dictionary to search for the meaning of quite a few words. They all paint a dismal picture of that particular moment in time. The flow and rhythm give the feeling of a stream that in the end carries your sadness away.

Wonderfully expressed!

Love and hugs.
Margherita

Dark Stranger
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8 posted 2009-09-15 07:22 AM


ms browneyes..I can see a girl in woman shoes dancing here..and a woman barefoot laughing too..enjoyed it ms
Artic Wind
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9 posted 2009-09-15 03:36 PM


Beautifully penned. I love emotion filled writes!


ARCTIC WIND

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10 posted 2009-09-16 09:41 AM


Always enjoy reading your splendid, unique style and wonderful poetry.

Very nice.
Tracey.

Chalmette Guy
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11 posted 2009-09-16 10:08 AM


This has a beautiful sounding tone to it with the word choices you did and it rolls off the mind's tongue.
jwesley
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12 posted 2009-09-16 10:13 AM


Ah, I too like emotion-filled writes and this one certainly, wonderfully qualifies.

j.

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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13 posted 2009-09-16 01:00 PM


Shellie... this is beautiful writing.. aching but beautiful..

Bisous de Paris
RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

brneyedgrly
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14 posted 2009-09-17 12:05 PM



             thanks so much

          for all the kind words

                  


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