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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
there is some mist in my head, kind of vertigo, I can’t see through my eyes, I would so much like to watch a giraffe eating grass, and to learn about seeking gold in rivers of Kenya. Right now I tremble and smoke confusion, I feel everything and can’t move, serenity escapes like a child, who am I ? What can I do about what I miss ? I miss everything, I am getting old and watch clouds in the sky to forget my fatigue, my fear of missing you or not. There is some mist in my head, kind of vertigo, I can’t see, I can’t hear, I can’t smell, my senses have abandoned me, thoughts are dark flag, my fatigue sails like a pirate ship ready to assault every sanity of my closed seas. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Yann, hello it's me, listen to me, sit down and relax! This is such a vivid description of fatigue that you stirred my nursing instincts. You have done an incredible job here, though I hope it does not reflect your reality. I feel the fatigue too after all of these loooong hooooooooooooooot days, that seem to never have an end. Love, Margherita  |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
A very interesting read, with a dark tint. I really liked how you talked about the loss of senses. That added a perfect touch to this gloomy, yet poetic goodness of a write.  ARCTIC WIND |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
hello Margherita, thank you for sharing my fatigue, I can reassur you, my this was a week ago, I feel better now even if I know that these moments of nervous fatigue are inevitable...Thank you for your charming comment and enjoy hoooooooooot days, winter is stepping fast and will overtake automn soon. have a nice day yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thanks AW for your kind and warm words, yes fatigue can be gloomy and tear apart our brain... have a nice day yann |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Yann, Take it easy buddy. It sounds like you're working too hard. Think of relaxing things. Bobby |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
2islander2 - fatique will do some strange things to one. Wish you well... BC |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
thanks bobby for the wise advice. It will be obeyed . yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
thanks bill, good to hear your words. regards yann |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
I'm always tired I just drink coffee wake up!! |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
yann, When you write, I feel as if I am getting to know just a bit more. I like the honesty of your poetry. It, and you, are special. Alison |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
dear Yann... I like this very descriptive write... sending you some of my special RDB  from Paris to smile your days.Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
thanks shelly, coffe is a solution, I prefer a liter of orange juice a day...it works too... have a nice day yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
thanks Alison for the very supportive comment, I apprecaite a lot your work, so spiritful and imaginative... have a nice day yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
hello Roniece, enjoy your trip and journey in Paris, I appreciated so much the poem you wrote 2 days ago, it is so inspiring. have a nice day yann |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
there is some mist in my head, kind of vertigo, I can’t see through my eyes, I would so much like to watch a giraffe eating grass, and to learn about seeking gold in rivers of Kenya. Yann my good friend, what you need is a trip to Kenya where you really can see those Giraffes, I wholly recommend it. It's a trip you will never forget. Good luck and travel soon. Lindsay |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Man oh man, Yann! I sure as heck wish I could write like that when I am over-fatigued! Even through your fugue state, you managed to write a poem that really grabs the reader! In one of the replies you wrote, I see that you are feeling better now! ~ Thank goodness! As they say, "You can't keep a good man down for long!"  Giving you some of my morning dew tonic, Love and a big energizing hug, Linda  |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
thanks Lindsay for the precious tip, next summer I wil travel and take some distance, we need to take break from time to time; thanks again for the comment. yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thanks a lot linda for the smiling comment, your tonic dew wake me up and I can feel the good vibrations arriving at me....The hard job is to go at work at eight o clock since a week, holidays ended and made me a little depressed, for a while until I get used again to work... hugs yann |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
This exactly how i feel after a long hard day Yann. Wonderfully expressed. "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hello Prasad, thanks for the sharing comment, these are painful moments indeed when you know that your mind is exhausted and all we have to do is to rest, let things quiet for a while... best wishes yann |
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