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poddarku
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since 2008-01-15

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india

0 posted 2009-08-29 09:28 AM

eyes trace some sounds

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Sounds are so delicate
they break
whenever I speak.
All you can hear
is a door
making squeaks
and you take it as my
terms of love.
I close the door softly;
behind me a stray sun
has followed me home.
It needs no sound to make.
Both of us can see its eyes.
A home is needed.
We lost our distance
while caring the new pet
making delicate sounds
of love.

© 2009-Copyright reserved Kushal Poddar

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

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Eternity

1 posted 2009-08-29 10:11 AM

Dear Ku, the beauty and tenderness and depth of this blow me away.

Nice to have you posting and such an exquisite write!

It's a keeper.

Love and hugs.
Margherita

"Love is the One who masters all things;
I am mastered totally by Love."
(Rumi)

Martie

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2 posted 2009-08-29 10:46 AM

Fresh and original use of words..."a stray sun" Wish I had thought of that.

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light

3 posted 2009-08-29 11:08 AM

Hi, Ku!

I was so plesed to see that you are posting again! Your delicate, sophisticated pennings add greatly to pip's poetic grace.

"I close the door softly;
behind me a stray sun
has followed me home."

Giving you a big, warm, welcome-back hug!

Linda

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16

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4 posted 2009-08-30 10:23 PM

Happy to be reading you again. Ku. Fine writing here.
Ida

poddarku
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india

5 posted 2009-08-30 10:26 PM

THank you my friends

Alison

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6 posted 2009-09-02 04:22 PM

I really like the thought of eyes tracking sounds, Ku. Lovely writing.

Alison

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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7 posted 2009-09-03 01:04 PM

love this writing of yours Ku... wonderful!

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Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Midnitesun

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Gaia

8 posted 2009-09-03 04:02 PM

Beautifully tender and soft.
Love that 'stray sun' imagery.
Good to read your words again.

Artic Wind
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since 2007-09-16

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Realm of Supernatural

9 posted 2009-09-03 05:18 PM

Tender indeed. This really has a certain touch to it. Loved it.

ARCTIC WIND

Alwye

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In the space between moments

10 posted 2009-09-04 10:11 PM

"Sounds are so delicate
they break
whenever I speak."-- now that is a powerful image.

I love your way with words here. Exellent write!

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

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by the sea

11 posted 2009-09-05 04:51 AM

Hi Poddarku...such sensitivity and delicacy in the words and images; a really enjoyable share.

yann

ESHA SEN GUPTA
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since 2009-09-01

Posts 108
Maharashtra,India

12 posted 2009-09-05 06:21 AM

Hallo I am new here and I am going through poem when I get time.Some I find awesome and some simple but great yours really shows a delicate side of human love.

Mrs Esha

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