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Before The Dawn
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Before The Dawn |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States 
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Before The Dawn By Paul Wilson ( Written for Someone Special To Me ) Darkness surrounds me like a cocoon protecting me or so it seems to my mind Where is the light that I use to know so well it’s embrace escapes me and leaves me cold Locked in the recesses of my soul somewhere feelings… deep feelings I can’t explain Loneliness a coat I wear with regret tomorrow would be better off without me Ringing of phone breaks the silence of this living hell ignore it my mind says talking unable to comprehend Into the darkness of my mind I retreat finding comfort from the world but not the pain Yes the pain…the pain that’s why I’m here relief never comes as tears fall again Memories of a better life gone forever… (maybe not) consumed by darkness and pain but yet I fight…fight with all my heart to win this battle ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ Paul [This message has been edited by Paul Wilson (08-24-2009 10:05 PM).] |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
I know how you feel, Paul. Loneliness is an awful feeling to have. Hang in there, you'll make it. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Fortunately, I've never personally sunk that low, but I have witnessed the fall of others into that dark, lonely abyss full of pain and sorrow ~ and you nailed it, Paul. You expressed that kind of anguish and despair, very well. May the person who inspired this write, come back into the light and cast out all brooding darkness. A fine, empathetic piece of writing.   Linda |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Paul, I don't know if aging has something to do with these feelings or not~~ but I sometimes find myself reflecting and wondering if things were different or had remained the way they once were when I felt it was happier and easier times, would the future have turned out to be any different as far as todays' feelings and thoughts. Guess we can't predict how we will feel as time marches on. for a thoughtful write.M |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Hi Paul, this reminded me of a poem I wrote a few years ago. Believe me I know this pain all too well, but take solice in the fact that it WILL get better.... btw, here's the poem I was referring to... Surviving Yet Not Living Lost, alone and scared Somewhere in this night Blinded by a love once held No switch to trip the light I shiver at the sound Of wolves howling at the sky Calling as if beckoning me To kiss this life good-bye I scream out at the silence To chase the sound away But the wolves just keep howling Asking me to come out and play Hello!, Hello!, Hello! Someone!, Someone!, Someone! The echo is all I here Bouncing back and forth Blackness crashing all around In the silence of these halls Nothing, do my hands caress As I reach out to find a wall Not a glimmer of hope do I foresee Within this hallowed tomb Not living, just surviving My mind in a padded room Seeking for the shelter Of her memory's loving arms A safe harbour in this journey To keep me from all harm Yet, nothing but blackness Do these eyes ever see Seeking, finding nothing But this perverted misery No chance to find myself Without this heartache's spell Yet, not daring to fold the cards Of which this life has dealt by: Jeffrey Carter |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Oklahoma Rose...Thanks for caring. This was written as a reflection of how someone very dear to me feels and what she goes thru everyday. I really appreciate the reply...Paul Linda...I hope you are right and she does find the strength and light needed to come out of this dark lonesome place she is in. Next to my wife she is the single most important person in my life. Thanks so much for caring and for your reply...Paul Maureen...I don't think aging has anything to do with it, it's more of a cronic pain she suffers from, never easing up enough for her to say she had a good day, all of her days are terrible and she has to deal with all the other things the pain brings along for the ride. Thanks for caring...Paul Jeffery...That is a touching poem you wrote. I definately see the simularities. Cronic pain, depression & anxiety can really destroy a person, and make them want to check out of this world. It is a constant battle for her as well as myself and my wife just trying to keep her upbeat and fighting, till hopefully the pain goes away...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: This spark of hope sounds so good and makes it seem possible to get out of darkness. Very sensitive write, dear Paul. Love, Margherita |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Paul - my friend, you're feelings come out totally in this writing, so sadly they do, but with hope. Dang, I really felt this writing. Email me if you would like to put your words to graphics... BC |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fine writing...James |
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Toccatta Junior Member
since 2009-07-08
Posts 26 |
Your constructive critique box says you're just learning. It doesn't sound it to me! I like your poem. |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Margherita...We can only HOPE things get better and she is able to have the pain free life she deserves. Thanks so much for caring...Paul Bill...Sorry if I hit a tender spot in you. Sometimes I just have to get my feelings out in order to continue to be strong and to cope with the pain and hurt my loved ones feel. I may take you up on the graphics.Thanks for the offer and reply...Paul James...Thank you sir, I really appreciate your reply...Paul Toccatta...So very glad you liked this. I really do feel like I am still learning, but I do know more today than I did when I put that comment in my critique box. Maybe its time to change it to something else...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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ESHA SEN GUPTA Member
since 2009-09-01
Posts 108Maharashtra,India |
Touching,I liked it very much. Love Esha |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
ESHA...Thanks very much for reading and for your reply...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Paul - my friend this is one sad writing, however, it has to be way up there as one of your best writings... BC |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Paul, You are on of the best writers when it comes to writing bare feelings. I always read you when you post. And I remember it is about some one else. You also have a caring soul. latearrival. |
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meljo Junior Member
since 2009-09-24
Posts 10CA, USA |
Well written. Some times I wonder, are we different from the rest? Some times, I wish that I don't feel as much. |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Bill...Thanks again my friend for your kind words. I wrote an extended version of this but promised I would not post it. Your replies are always a welcomed comfort...Paul latearrival...That is a mighty nice compliment you have given me. I love to put myself in the place of others and write what they feel and go thru.A very special person to me said the same thing, she doesn't understand how I can get into other peoples minds and souls and write what I do, but somehow it just happens. Thanks for the nice reply...Paul Meljo... Thank you so much for taking time to read and reply, it means a great deal too me...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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larzana Member
since 2009-09-17
Posts 55 |
Very sad, rings true for my own feelings. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Very sad and touching poem. Ida |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
the battle, yes... well, you already know |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
larzana...Hope all is well with you. It's not me thats hurting, but someone very special too me, so I feel their pain just like they do but mine is emotional pain. Thanks for the read & reply and I hope things get better for you...Paul Marchmadness...Ida I really appreciate your caring thoughts. Your reply means alot to me...Paul Dixie...Thanks. Words cannot begin to say how I feel, cause we both have known the struggles and fighting battles throughout our lives. Thanks so very much...Paul I will send you an e mail about another subject if you don't mind ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ Paul |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
I am very sorry to hear of your depression Paul but hang in there, for I too saw that spark of hope. Sit down in front of your PC and type out all the good things you have in your life and in another column type the things that cause concern. I'm sure the good column will far outweigh the bad. Good luck to you my friend for you have a lot of people pulling for you including me. Lindsay |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Lindsay...Thanks for your concern, but I am not depressed, I am writing about someone very close to me that has cronic pain and anxiety attacks. I really do thank you thou for caring and your well wishes...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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