Open Poetry #45 |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere ![]() |
my mind echoes with the tones of lost remembrance and resonates all along the sharp notes of reality my heart holds the secrets from the truth of yesterday and searches uselessly in the hide-and-seek future my strength swallows the pain of finding my own way and flourishes on the journey from here to there my hope waves intimately from the elusive tomorrow and beckons me to chance the winds of change my love trembles on the taut bow of endless possibility and hovers in the honed moments of silent pause . flesh, blood, bone, love...twisted ~ L. Hall |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
You have quickly become one of my favorite poets on the site, Shellie. This is excellent. Ida |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
hide and seek future... yup that sounds about right the last two lines are GREAT ~Brad |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
heart and hope is all a girl has when she wears her woman skin.. enjoyed it ms |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
I know all about that hide and seak future. Hang in there, my friend. Things will get better! |
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Yoinn Senior Member
since 2007-08-16
Posts 649Michigan |
This is a great poem Berney, both in content and structure. My fav. line "my strength swallows the pain of finding my own way and flourishes on the journey from here to there" Your poetic muscle is flourishing. Yoin |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
my love trembles on the taut bow of endless possibility and hovers in the honed moments of silent pause Cool stuff Shellie. And I always like how you present your poetry on here too. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
Even in pause, you appear very in touch with the natural order from past to future to the being in the moment of now. Nice reflections mixed with a warm setting |
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peaceseaker Member
since 2009-07-29
Posts 161 |
Wonderful imagery in this..and somehow I could identify with it...enjoyed..peaceseaker... |
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Heart2Heart Senior Member
since 2009-05-15
Posts 738Scotland/Norway |
This poem holds so much hope and yearning. I am sure you can achieve anything you want Shellie. A joy to read. Heart2Heart |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
a very enjoyable read. yanh |
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zaaclindsay Member
since 2009-08-12
Posts 111Ottawa Ontario |
hi there, I like the way the second line of each segment affirms who you are and how you choose to see things. this is an easy thing to forget...and something some never learn. nicely penned. zaac I kept wondering why that frisbee kept getting bigger and bigger....and then it hit me. |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
piercing ...... ![]() Ct |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
hovers in the honed moments arshum. Paul I love my dog, and my truck. It's that simple, really. |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
thanks, Ida..that just made my week love you, lady brad...thank you for your GREAT love it! ds glad you enjoyed...thanks susie yes, I'll find my way...so will you love you yo thanks for seeing my muscles jer thanks always for your words and confidence gracious goddess...your words mean so much...thank you seeker glad you identified..thanks for stoppin K you always make me feel good! thanks love you yanno thanks island friend zaac thank you...they were hard lessons! Ct so glad you're hooked! : ) Paul thanks...good to hear from you . love, shel |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Shove, Love. Move over so I can join you in that "Pause". There is a whole lotta "mind", "heart", "strength", "hope" and love in there! "my love trembles on the taut bow of endless possibility and hovers in the honed moments of silent pause" ~ What a writer!!! Giving you an extra, loving sol sistah hug, Linda ![]() ![]() |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"my mind echoes with the tones of lost remembrance" even your opening line is beautiful, Shellie. ![]() M |
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Jeffrey Carter![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
As an addict in recovery this touched me deeply, especially these lines... "my heart holds the secrets from the truth of yesterday and searches uselessly in the hide-and-seek future my strength swallows the pain of finding my own way and flourishes on the journey from here to there" ....we (addicts) learn that no one knows what the future holds, that we can only take one day at a time and take solice in the fact that we grow stronger each day. Do you mind if I print this out and post it on my office wall? ... it truly is an inspiring read for me. |
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Alison![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I am right up there with Ida, sheli. You are among my favorite poets. Alison |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: A memorable thought, dear Shellie Poetess. Simply awesome write! Love, Margherita |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
thank you everyone, so much Jeff Carter...hope you went ahead and printed it out! ![]() |
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