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Dark Daughter |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Dark Daughter The muted sighs of deep desire tangle in the dark strands of her parted hair, caressing every lock with whispers of divine elegance, speaking softly, testifying of her sacred love with hushed reverence. "Dark daughter we adore you," says the starlit wind, which sings the warm nightsong. And all the frolicking creatures of natures evening reverie stop to hear that sound. "Dark daughter," says the sky, "You are beautiful standing poised with slender grace beneath the shadow of my covering arms." And then she smiles that endless smile and all the beasts of evenings' shade begin to celebrate anew, while the scent of midnight looms behind dark daughters' lithesome form, as she slowly drifts into the waiting night. [This message has been edited by XGarapanX (08-08-2009 03:34 AM).] |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
simply beautiful, a well crafted poem with enlightning expressions, enjoyed very much my read. yann |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Merci, Mr. Islander! ·´~`·»Brett«·´~`· |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Brett, This is a fine poem about a fine lady. It works for me. Bobby |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Sensual and captivating write |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
That was one mighty fine write and a very enjoyable read!!!  Beautifully penned! I'm going back for a second helping!  EA |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
There is something magical in your descriptions, and a little gyspy-like, too, as the mystery of dusky beauty permeates the lines and paints the lithesome elegance of youthful grace in your poetry. Captivating and much enjoyed! kl |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
This was smooth, flowing, and hypnotic. I enjoyed the journey. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Excellent write, XGarapanX. Simply breathtaking. ida |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
I'm grateful that so many of you enjoyed this piece. Thank you for coming by! ·´~`·»Brett«·´~`· |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
A real delight to read this one Brett, You wrote it well, take care my friend. Lindsay |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Thank you Mr. Lindsay. ·´~`·»Brett«·´~`· |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"Dark daughter," says the sky, "You are beautiful standing poised with slender grace beneath the shadow of my covering arms." even this verse alone is beautiful~~ M |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
T'was beauty that inspired it! ·´~`·»Brett«·´~`· |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
What a fairy tale you have written. I was swept up in your mystical words that created the images in my head. A |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
I'm pleased to have evoked something of the passion that went into this piece. Thank you! ·´~`·»Brett«·´~`· |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
this is wonderful! I am liking your work! shellie . flesh, blood, bone, love...twisted |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
I'm very pleased for this report, for I admire your work as well and hope to be reading more of your poems as you are able to share your poetic treasures with us. ·´~`·»Brett«·´~`· |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
If ever a poem were so perfect, or a love so true, or a passion so strong, this would be the one, hanging for millions of eyes to view, and millions of hearts to feel, Inside a gallery of art, painted on the walls of my heart.... your masterpiece....my heart! ~ARH  |
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peaceseaker Member
since 2009-07-29
Posts 161 |
Hi...there's not much more that I can say that other's have not about this...absolutely an intriguing write..one to read over and over again..such superb imagery..one of my favorite lines: "Dark daughter we adore you," says the starlit wind, which sings the warm nightsong. ps |
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shalisadefa Member
since 2009-08-13
Posts 114 |
With every phrase the world you describe I envisualize, beautifully written, however it was the title which caught my attention and much to my surprise I was not dissapointed by the content. Exactly what I was hoping for. I have a "dark daughter" and this is how I view her. |
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unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477 |
Lovely twining, dear Mesmerist. What could be more enchanting than starlit wind? Heather |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
deliciously dark The only time we waste is the time we spend thinking we are alone. |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Most kind of you all for such positive comments. It's a pity I have to leave again because you have all been so awesome. ·´~`·»Brett«·´~`· |
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