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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments 
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Thick, simmering, folding around itself the air drips fever-heat down over huddled grasses hypnotic is the seething sun pulsing his moistened fervor into every shaded corner— nothing will mollify his wrath. the Mother heaves her breast yearning for a shimmer of rain or a cotton-puff dream to soften the too sharp glints but she senses only heat laying itself heavy across her chest creeping into her mouth and releasing it’s toxic swelter. |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Krista, You just wrote about our July - and as soon as August hit, we went into fall. Had frost this morning. I prefer the frost to the heat. This is good. Alison |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Odd, it was just the opposite for us (no frost though). July was very chilly...I wore pants and long sleeves a lot of the time. August, however, has been sweltering already. It's a shock to the system. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
You always had a way with imagery Krista. Nice to see you posting again. |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
cotton-puff dream (LOVE THAT!) and the last stanza is magnificent, overall very powerful |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
kewl krista..way kewl |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"Thick, simmering, folding around itself the air drips fever-heat down over huddled grasses" ~ Now that's what I'd call 'close'. Whew, bring on the cooling rain! lol "or a cotton-puff dream to soften the too sharp glints"  Thankfully, we have had a fairly cool summer and our air-conditioning bills have been cut in half this year! Giving you a 'cool' hug, Linda  |
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peaceseaker Member
since 2009-07-29
Posts 161 |
I too have to agree that the 3rd v. was my favorite image....oh, how I personally look forward to the Fall, my favorite time of the year..after such a sweltering summer...much enjoyed Alwey....thank you...ps |
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Callista Member
since 2008-10-05
Posts 63USA |
I really admire this poem."Hypnotic is the seething sun " is my favorite part. I've been there. The glimpse up close of the "mother" was really nice too. Made me feel it. Cal |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
the Mother heaves her breast yearning for a shimmer of rain or a cotton-puff dream to soften the too sharp glints ____________________________ wonderful writing! shel |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
I love the imagery. I can take the heat sitting in front of the fan  The only time we waste is the time we spend thinking we are alone. |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Thank you for the kind comments, everyone. Luckily, Minnesota is cooling off again, which makes me happy. |
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