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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana 
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Under the surface, within the mind A connection forms synapses fire Neurons trigger sensory overload Of which we never tire Physical suffering and pleasure All begin deep within the brain Letting loose the sensual flood That comes like electric rain The gates opened, levees breached As the torrents crash and cascades Finding all the pathways That between us our minds have made Impulses given to highest peak Off the charts and then the currents flow To calm the tides in lowest ebb We see all, in each mind’s afterglow |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Jer, I love this: "Letting loose the sensual flood That comes like electric rain" Fine write, as always. |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I really love the thought of "electric rain" (laughs - I had to come back and fix "electric rain" ~ I had "electric brain". Mine is not wired at this time of day) - and I really like this poem. A |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
I like this, less jaded, you |
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jody5 Senior Member
since 2005-12-21
Posts 876California, U.S.A. |
Bravo, this was an excellent write. I understood exactly what you were saying. It flowed really well. Hugs Kimberly |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Blame it on the electric rain, eh!? Intense poetry and very well put. Nice read, guy~ |
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