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crosscountry83
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since 2009-07-30

Posts 345

0 posted 2009-07-31 05:12 PM

This needs a lot of work, I'm sure, only spent like fifteen minutes on it. Let me know what you think....

I see her, so tiny and beautiful,
black fur, pink tongue,
the small beginning of man’s best friend
a dark bundle of love.

I see her, less tiny, but still beautiful,
romping around in the yard,
wrestling, teasing, playing
this is how it should be.

I see her, resting, sleeping,
chew-toys scattered around,
like fallen soldiers in battle,
I come back to the present.

I see her, on the table at the vet,
a file in one hand, x-rays in another,
they don’t know what’s wrong.
this is not how it should be.

I see her, locked up in the kennel,
four weeks of rest, they say,
maybe it will get better.
maybe not.

I see her, limping around
with pleading eyes
she did not heal. it isn’t better.
Why did it have to be her?

I see her, lying down carefully
much in pain, I can see,
Will surgery work to heal?
What will come to be?

[This message has been edited by crosscountry83 (08-01-2009 12:46 PM).]

N|D|N|C|Lost-Poet
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since 2009-07-30

Posts 360
New Orleans

1 posted 2009-07-31 10:22 PM

I always believe the best poetry comes the quickest, and directly from the soul.

Such as my title 'Opened the tap' was meant to show.

Your poem was fantastic, many prefer to rhyme or to follow a certain syllable rhythm.

Beautifully captured.

-LostPoet

crosscountry83
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since 2009-07-30

Posts 345

2 posted 2009-07-31 10:39 PM

Are you saying I should, or that it's good that I didn't.....?

Rileigh

Clockwork_Orange
Senior Member

since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

3 posted 2009-08-01 01:48 PM

there nothing greater than the love between a dog and its owner

~ you cant run from yourself ~

crosscountry83
Member

since 2009-07-30

Posts 345

4 posted 2009-08-01 01:55 PM

There isn't, but it hurts when things go wrong.

[This message has been edited by crosscountry83 (08-03-2009 02:27 PM).]

priyanka
Member

since 2009-06-15

Posts 216
india

5 posted 2009-10-05 07:29 PM

Aww...heartfelt wishes
beautiful but sad poem
I understand the bond between an owner and his dog.
its precious
hope your dog is fine?

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

6 posted 2009-10-05 09:42 PM

I see.. a deep love between best friends... and I hurt for you both.

crosscountry83
Member

since 2009-07-30

Posts 345

7 posted 2009-10-05 11:12 PM

Thanks for replying... it's been awhile. Unfortunately, she wasn't fine. We couldn't improve her quality of life, so the inevitable was necessary. It was the best thing we could have done for her.

Alison

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since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
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8 posted 2009-10-10 12:06 PM

Rileigh,

This is so sad - I hope that you heal and share your love with the other puppy.

xoxoxo
Alison

hafrock
Junior Member

since 2009-10-10

Posts 34
India

9 posted 2009-10-10 03:45 PM

It must'v been hard..sorry

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