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Raven Consideration |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! 
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Raven Consideration I wondered what that raven was thinking As he swaggered around the grocery store parking lot He chuckled and chortled like a dirty old man As he eyed the shoppers and checked out their goods His wings wore the paint of green fields And the hue of blue skies before the smoke settled Yet, he looked unkempt as if he had far too much to do And too little time to worry about preening Maybe he was too busy posturing and preaching I wondered why his look made me nervous inside His gaze mocked me as he looked through me And beyond me as if I am as transparent as I sometimes feel He flew away and laughed as if knowing Like all ravens know – That he is smarter than the average me - Alison |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
LOL! I enjoyed reading this. You think that bird was smarter than you, huh! I doubt that! [This message has been edited by Oklahoma Rose (08-02-2009 12:07 AM).] |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Yes they are smart birds my dear Alison but I'm sure they are not half as smaqrt as you are. Don't sell yourself short whatever you do. Love Lindsay |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
this 'write' is very fine ... I especially like: "His wings wore the paint of green fields And the hue of blue skies before the smoke settled Yet, he looked unkempt as if he had far too much to do And too little time to worry about preening Maybe he was too busy posturing and preaching" much applause for this 'penning' !! |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Black birds have been always a favorite of mine. I'm not sure why. Enjoyed this poem, very much! |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo dear Alison, I remember the ravens in India. They were always big, and noisy. Love Bobby |
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Callista Member
since 2008-10-05
Posts 63USA |
You captured my feeling about ravens in the "chuckling and chortling like a dirty old man..." and "mocked me.." I really enjoyed it. Does anyone ever see them positively? I am curious about a poem about ravens from that point of view. "The Moving Finger writes, and, having writ, |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Sue, Yep, I do think so. He's not smarter than I in all ways, but he is smarter than I in some ways. Love ya, darlin'. Alison - Thank you, dear Lindsay. He's a clever bird - and has his own intelligence. I don't think I am not smart - I was writing what he was thinking. xoxoxo Alison - Bruce, thank you, my dear friend. Hugs to you too, Alison - Karou, I know what you mean. I love the ravens and magpies the best of all. Thank you for reading this one. Alison - Bobby, Maybe that's why I love them -- they are funny and noisey! Love, Alison - Callista, I think you misunderstood - I love ravens. I was just writing it from the perspective of his attitude as I saw him. I am one of those people who break bags of dog food when it is -40 so I can feed them in the Sam's parking lot. Of course, I get the pleasure of watching them too. I did a haiku and photograph (the picture is one I took this last winter) that you might like. /main/forumdisplay.cgi?action=displayarchive&number=100&topic=001510 Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. Alison, the Ravin' Raven Lover |
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Callista Member
since 2008-10-05
Posts 63USA |
I knew that! Ha" Ha! I would be embarrassed if everyone that read my poems thought every poem was about me. |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
wonderful Ali-girl! a great write!  RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Callista, I love your responses. They are so natural. Hugs to you, Alison - RDB, Love you lots and thank you for reading. xoxoxo Alison |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I just love this, Alison. I find crows fascinating and you are right they are very smart. One Easter I hid plastic eggs for my kids with candy,little toys and trinkets. Some of the eggs were clear on one end so a crow saw a little gold necklace inside, flew down, pecked it open and flew away with the necklace. |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Ida, I love that story. The ravens in one small town here in Alaska learned how to strip the rubber off the windshield wipers. People didn't know it was gone until they went to turn on their wipers ... Foiled again! Gotta love the ravens! A |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Alison, I hate ravens but I love your poem and the way you tell the story, this is so inspiring.. have a nice day yann |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Thank you, yann. They can intimidate me, that's for sure. Alison |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Alison, your astute observations are bang on! Amazingly so! Perhaps the Raven is one of your Animal Totems! I wouldn't doubt it, dear "Keeper of Secrets".  For your interest ~ http://www.animaltotem.com/raven.html Love & Raven Light, Linderlou  |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
I love them too and I agree that their gaze can intimidate! I adore your poems about animals, you have a special sensitivity to observe them and understand them, dear Alison. The ravens are the first in the morning to wake me up and we are not in the countryside! Love, Margherita  |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
ali ~chuckling at the windshield wiper story~ very good descriptions here love, shel my mind won't rest and I don't sleep... |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Thank you, Linda. I was talking to some Indian friends that I work with .. they told me the Raven is definitely my totem. I love the link. xoxoxo Alison - Dear Margherita, Thank you. I honestly just think I write about what I see around me. I love nature and the flowers and wildlife. xoxox Alison - shel I am so glad that I made you laugh. The ravens did anyway - I laugh at them too. Thank you for stopping in. xoxoox Ali |
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jbstillwater Member
since 2009-07-03
Posts 216Albuquerque, New Mexico |
I enjoyed this one very much, Alison, and yes, perhaps he is smarater than all of us! (lol) Huggs Jan |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Yep, you are so right. Thank you, Jan.  Alison |
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Suncleaver Member
since 2009-01-18
Posts 481Stafford England |
Hehe. I loved your interpretation of the raven. I often wear black leather trousers and a longcoat, and I have a penchant for shiny things. Does that make me a bit of a raven? :p |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
Luke, Yes, yes it does. LOL -Zach Alison, This made me laugh and think a bit. This poem is inspiring. I quite often think that when birds look at me, its like they know something I don't and are waiting for something to happen. LOL. Library -Zach |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Luke, Only if you haul the shiney things home and stash them in your roost. I am glad you understand the humor of the raven. They are clever and fun Thank you for commenting and making me smile. Alison - Zach, You know I think you are one heck of a part of PiP. Don't you? I do. Thank you for stopping by. Alison |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
lol Ravens are smarter than me for sure. I love thos guys. |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Me too, CG. Thanks for stopping by. Alison |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
If a window wasn't there to keep her inside, my Kate would be giving the ravens around my place an attitude adjustment. *S* So when one tilts his head and looks at me with superiority, I remind him I'm smart enough to close the door between him and the cat! LOL I enjoyed this very much... and am glad to know I'm not the only one perused and found lacking. LOL |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Oh yeah! Honestly? I think he sneered at me. Thank you, sweet one. xoxox Alison |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (gives a little smirk) Yep, I bet most birds know more about what's on our minds than we are even consciously aware often! How I wish I had wings and piercing aerodynamic eyes!    (giggles) This is such a wonderful slice of life you've depicted ever so well in this poem here, my friend, and all too persuadable too given it takes place in something that often appears mundane...........a grocery store parking lot! (huggies) Fabulous words as always, hope you had a great weekend dear Alicia, yay!  XOXO, Lisping Hibiscus "If we have no peace, it is because we have forgotten that we belong to each other" |
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terasinas Member
since 2006-03-24
Posts 91Michigan ... The Great Lakes |
What can I say tht hasnt been said? Bravo! |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Noah, Ravens crack me up. They have such great senses of humor and they are clever as can be. I can watch them all day and still not know what they are smirking at. xoxoo Alison - tera, Thank you - you make me smile. A |
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ESHA SEN GUPTA Member
since 2009-09-01
Posts 108Maharashtra,India |
The humility of your poem touched me.It is lovely. Love Esha |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Esha, Thank you so much. xoxoxo Alison |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh wow ... I loved this Alison. Wonderfully descriptive. You've captured the characteristics of this creature and given him such visual significance. I could picture this perfectly. Really well done indeed. Best wishes, /Kit |
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Bob K Member Elite
since 2007-11-03
Posts 4208 |
Dear Alison, Crow, by Ted Hughs. also http://www.thebeckoning.com/poetry/hughes/hughes.html I walked out the door the other day. A crow was cawing repeatedly at the top of a tree; which one, I couldn't tell. I turned around and turned around until I thought I had the crow spotted. I raised one finger and pointed. The cawing stopped, and the crow flew off. Now the crow returns every few days, with friends, and the game continues. We are all pleased with ourselves. I enjoyed the poem. Bob Kaven |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Kit, Thank you - I love ravens. They are mystical and magical - and carry the spirits of many inside them. Love you, Alison - Bob, What a lovely surprise! Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. I'll have to pick up Crow. I have read some of Ted Hughes poetry before and have enjoyed it. I'll have to read in more depth. I'll let you know when I have the book - Alison |
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crosscountry83 Member
since 2009-07-30
Posts 345 |
I really enjoyed it.... I'm off to read more of your poems. |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Thank you, Rileigh. xoxoxo A |
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