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jbstillwater
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since 2009-07-03

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Albuquerque, New Mexico

0 posted 2009-07-26 02:10 PM

Summer came, went like a flash .
Soft scents of wet grass -old hats.
Weathered slippers nesting on the porch.
Collecting scents of memories left behind
A family waits.
She called, whispering through breath hollow.
A calloused voice, not the first time, not the last.
.
He is ill; he may not see tomorrow-baby can t breathe.
A strong family gathers, offers good thoughts, prays
for a late summer breeze to come
and sweep the porch clean, scattering nesting hats
and worn slippers -gone forever in the wind.
Pray, shatter the lie- life holds only one good tear.
The promise that only one bloom will fall from the vine
or carry sharp thorns to pierce a mother’s heart.
.
Come alone, leave alone!
.
Tis the middle journey cared and shared.
Pray, a good family has strength, love
to carry through nesting slippers and weathered hats
left out on the porch.
Long gone from late summer' s blow.
Yet, collect scents of memories left behind,
when summer came and went like a flash,
and a family gathered to pray.

D.Lester Young
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since 2001-12-08

Posts 1219
Austin, Tx

1 posted 2009-07-26 02:26 PM

The rippling Uni-Verse of your poetic wind currents caressing the canvas of other minds with exquisite details of Stillwater dynamic spectrum elocution presentations.

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16

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So. El Monte, California

2 posted 2009-07-26 05:06 PM

A touching and thoughtful write. JB.
Ida

Robert E. Jordan
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since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

3 posted 2009-07-26 06:15 PM

Yo dear Jan,

"Come alone, leave alone!"

Yes indeed. Birth and death are deeply personal matters.

Love Bobby

Margherita
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Eternity

4 posted 2009-07-27 05:41 AM

You have given me goosebumps with this intense, poignant, beautiful, heartwrenching write.

I was so totally part of the atmosphere you created.

An masterful piece of poetry, dear Jan.

Love,
Margherita

"Love is the One who masters all things;
I am mastered totally by Love."
(Rumi)

Midnitesun

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Gaia

5 posted 2009-07-27 07:02 AM

You've wrapped this up well, giving the reader a softly focused picture of the circle of life.

Dark Stranger
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West Coast

6 posted 2009-07-27 08:07 AM

JB..the weaving of threads into the earth..I enjoyed this

Heart2Heart
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since 2009-05-15

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Scotland/Norway

7 posted 2009-07-27 10:10 AM

As if I was standing there amongst you, heartaching poesy dear Jan

Katriona

jbstillwater
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since 2009-07-03

Posts 216
Albuquerque, New Mexico

8 posted 2009-07-27 01:36 PM

Oh, thans so much, Poets, for enjoying this write.

Huggs to all
Jan

peaceseaker
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since 2009-07-29

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9 posted 2009-07-29 05:46 PM

Hi Jan....this is truly so carefully thought out and written with much emotion...so very touching to one's soul who has loved and lost...Thank you for sharing something so personal....peaceseaker

jbstillwater
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since 2009-07-03

Posts 216
Albuquerque, New Mexico

10 posted 2009-07-30 02:15 PM

Thanks, Peace

Great name!

Huggs
Jan

GBride
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11 posted 2009-07-30 07:40 PM

As I run down the list of poems today I am stopped by yours. I read one other of yours that stopped me. I read them though several times and I think you really have something extra. I see you just joined recently. I am looking forward to more of you fine poetry. Thank you for that gift. They are a fine present after a day of mind mindless work.

GBride
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12 posted 2009-07-30 07:42 PM

As I run down the list of poems today I am stopped by yours. I read one other of yours that stopped me. I read them though several times and I think you really have something extra. I see you just joined recently. I am looking forward to more of you fine poetry. Thank you for that gift. They are a fine present after a day of mind mindless work.

jbstillwater
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since 2009-07-03

Posts 216
Albuquerque, New Mexico

13 posted 2009-07-31 02:32 PM

Thanks, G Bride

Happy that you like my work. I am a writer, and have been writing all of my life. Although mostly a novelist, I have such a fondness for poetry. I just adore it!

Thanks again

Jan

Oklahoma Rose
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14 posted 2009-07-31 09:31 PM

A very touching and thoughtful write.

Alison

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15 posted 2009-08-01 03:14 AM

Jan,

We leave nothing permanent, do we. It all blows away and maybe sits on someone else's shelf for a time - until maybe it's just another forgotten piece of who we once were. Dust to dust - our possesions gather pieces of us as we become part of the earth.

You leave me thinking - and loving your poem.

Alison

nakdthoughts
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16 posted 2009-08-01 08:44 AM

I have been living this~~ sums it up well.

M

jbstillwater
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since 2009-07-03

Posts 216
Albuquerque, New Mexico

17 posted 2009-08-03 05:45 PM

Thanks fellow poets:

Happy that you enjoyed this one. Yes, dust to dust, Allison, not a doubt in my mind. those nesting hats and worn slippers are about all that we ever really leave behind. and so, while we are here, it is all about the family.

Huggs
Jan

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