Too Vulnerable For You - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

0 posted 2009-01-20 12:43 PM

Its all but a memory now
How you captured my heart
And used it against me
found it and tore me apart.

Its vague and familiar at once
I try to forget it all
But it doesn't want to let me go
You just wanted to see me fall

I held on to you
Trusted you. Believed you
The tables turned
Now I'm the one to lose

I should of saw this coming
I'll be more cautious next time around.
Bitter tears are left to dry
falling without a sound.

Its all but a memory now
How you captured my heart
And used it againt me
Found my weakness and tore me apart.

prettypinkrebel
Member

since 2007-11-07

Posts 104

1 posted 2009-01-21 08:51 AM

This was a good write. I could feel the emotion you had when writing it. Nice Job

Just.Another.Falling.Star
Member

since 2008-05-08

Posts 422
Canada

2 posted 2009-01-21 05:05 PM

oh zach, i hope you're feeling better than last night, cuz you got me super worried then.
great poem, really felt the emotion in this one...if flowed really well too.
ttyl

?ul!@nn@

these broken pieces of my heart are to shattered to be put back together again

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

3 posted 2009-01-21 06:54 PM

Damnn I Hope Your Alright Zach.. I Know How Your Feeling, ATM lifes hurting me and i'm barely breathing through the pain.. i'll try n catch up with u today.. if i don't then be strong.. i know julianna's gunna look after you..

Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

4 posted 2009-01-22 09:46 AM

Thanks for your comments. Jess I'm going to get a councilor soon. By today I should know he/she is. Hopefully they'll be able to help me get over this whole suicide thing. Thanks for your help and concern. Love you both!

-Zach

When I see your smile, and I know it’s not for me, that’s when I’ll miss you.

something meaningful
Junior Member

since 2009-07-17

Posts 12
Wisconsin, USA

5 posted 2009-07-24 03:00 PM

i love it. you put so much emotion into your words. its amazing.

precious pearls
Member

since 2009-07-24

Posts 110
NJ; United States

6 posted 2009-07-24 09:24 PM

It had so much life and emotion and sincerity and hurt in it... it was so sad, yet it spoke in such a way that I TOTALLY got where you were coming from... i had a similar experience and your words jus spoke how I felt at the time. I know that you'll b able 2 get over- this poem is one of the very first steps, trust me!
Anyway, it was just a moving poem, love it!!!

Always,
Kai (a.k.a. precious pearls)

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.