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UNTAMEDelegance
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0 posted 2009-07-03 11:40 PM


Walking down the hall
no one looks at me.
The other girls are beautiful.
I'm nothing much to see.

The other girls have boys
and phone and clothes and hair.
I'm alone and they all act
like no one's even there.

I don't have a gorgeous body
or beauty of any real kind,
but you'd think someone would look at me
instead of just passing on by.

So I thought I'd try to be stylish.
Give being pretty a whirl,
But nobody even batted an eye.

Okay.
I give up.
I guess I'm just
An ordinary girl.


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1 posted 2009-07-04 06:15 AM


So it's lucky that the world is full of ordinary boys.
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2 posted 2009-07-04 01:41 PM


I really love this poem. I'm gonna put this one in the my library. Keep writing. Your pretty good at it.

-Zach

"Who are you to judge the life I live? I know I'm not perfect" - Bob Marley

nehematala
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since 2009-05-21
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3 posted 2009-07-05 09:38 PM


Melissa not everyone may notice you but thats there loss you are an amazing beautiful Young lady and I miss you so much

The number one thing in acting is honesty: If you can fake that you've got it made.

something meaningful
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4 posted 2009-07-17 03:56 PM


i can totaly relate to this poem which makes it mean alot to me. i like it alot!! its well written too.
precious pearls
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5 posted 2009-07-24 09:41 PM


OMG when I read this, I was staring at it with my mouth open! It's like, I feel this way exactly some of the time, but I could never figure out how to express it! It rang with so much emotion and hurt and just the TRUTHFULNESS of your feelings! It was beautiful. And it wasn't beautiful because of the natural way the poem flowed, it was beautiful because of the honesty in your words! I think you should definetly take a bow for this one!

Always,
   Kai (a.k.a. precious pearls)

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