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Teen Poetry #9

Dirge Of Deliverance

Elias Nevermore
Member

since 2007-11-03

Posts 152

0 posted 2009-11-12 01:56 AM

Black cat builds his house upon a rock
and the white cat burns it down.

Black cat builds his house upon the Lord,
and escapes the white cat's hell.

So burn fire burn.
Burn a crimson red,
and turn the white
into charred black.

Black cat builds his house upon a rock
and the white cat kills him now.

Black cat builds his house upon the Lord,
and his race will not die out.

So burn fire burn.
Burn a lyrical red,
and turn the black
into white again.

Ashes to Ashes,
Dust to Dust,
And it all came tumbling down.

"Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there wondering, fearing,
Doubting, dreaming dreams no mortals ever dared to dream before;" -Edgar All

[This message has been edited by Elias Nevermore (11-12-2009 03:05 AM).]

freeand2sexy
Senior Member

since 2008-09-12

Posts 704
CA, USA

1 posted 2009-11-20 07:12 PM

I really like this! But I think I like it better without the last three lines. Nice write!

The hardest part about writing poetry,
is trying not to write like everyone else.

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