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Just.Another.Falling.Star
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0 posted 2009-01-18 03:51 PM


So after a week of feeling alone and broken, I finally found some words to put into something that makes sense. I don't know how good this is, but it's what I came up with for now. And thank you zach for telling me that poetry doesn't have to be pretty...it can be a rant of crazyness, lol.

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Three-hundred and sixty-five days
of learning to know you more.
Endless hours of talking to you,
not realizing I was flirting.

Five days a week
where I saw your wonderful smile.
Finding time to share together,
even though we'd get in trouble.

Three-hundred and sixty-five days
of what I thought was love.
Everything I felt for you was real,
but all I got was a conversation.

Five days a week
when I could feel happy again.
Those minutes were wasted on my part,
because now you hate me...

I don't know what happened to us,
how we can just stop.
Everything is over,
because you didn't feel it too.

I've stopped trying to get over you,
because I know that its impossible.
I still love you,
so I'll be here if you change your mind.

?ul!@nn@

these broken pieces of my heart are to shattered to be put back together again

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1 posted 2009-01-18 04:41 PM


See Julianna! I totally told you so! lol. Poems don't have to be pretty. And in this slight madness you have written here (:P) This poem turned out to be amazing and very well written! Also the Title and Picture were like perfect for this poem!!!!
Sorry about the exclamation points. If you haven't noticed I'm hyper.
(LIBRARY FOR SURE!!!)

-Zach

When I see your smile, and I know it’s not for me, that’s when I’ll miss you.

rebelangelv
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2 posted 2009-01-18 06:54 PM


ommmmmmmmmmmmmmmmg! i sooooooo have felt this so many times especially recently. this was amazing and i so wish i was the one who wrote it. great job!!!

only a vampire can love you forever.
forbidden to remember, terrified to forget

Just.Another.Falling.Star
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since 2008-05-08
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3 posted 2009-01-18 07:07 PM


aww...thanks so much! both zach and rebelangelv. i'm glad you liked it, alot, lol.
as zach already knows...this was extremely hard to get out, everything i wrote sounded stupid and cheesey, and it didn't make sense, until this, lol.
so thank you again!!!

?ul!@nn@

these broken pieces of my heart are to shattered to be put back together again

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