Another Bottle Down, Few Mor eTo Go.

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Teen Poetry #9

Another Bottle Down, Few Mor eTo Go.

Falling rain

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since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

0 posted 2009-08-30 08:21 AM

Wandering aimless
Down my old ways
another bottle empty
As I hum while I sway

I see the chaos
That bubble inside
But jolly I remain
The feelings I try and hide

Dancing a drunken dance
Under the pale light
Keeping under control
I'm such a terrible sight

I look into shop windows
And wonder who's looking back
The monster's drenched in tears
Shrouded in shadow's black

Another swig finding
himself at the bottles end
He looks back in pain
Looking at his only friend..

Clockwork_Orange
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since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

1 posted 2009-08-30 01:10 PM

DUDE. This one is BY FAR your greatest work thus far. loved it man. ive been there alot before man.

and for some reason, i was thinking of the first pirates movie

"why is all the rum gone?" lol

~ you cant run from yourself ~

Just.Another.Falling.Star
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since 2008-05-08

Posts 422
Canada

2 posted 2009-08-30 01:24 PM

zach, i almost can't believe you wrote this. its so utterly amazing, i can hardly say how much. great job with everything in it.
library

julianna

.:.:~]you clicked your heals and wished for me[~:.:.

XxForever.BrokenxX
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since 2008-01-20

Posts 891
Neverland

3 posted 2009-08-30 08:12 PM

Fantastic write Zach.

It's going in my library

{~~*~~}

Lacrimosa Dies Illa
[Oh that tearful day]
{~~*~~}

Falling rain

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since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

4 posted 2009-08-30 09:19 PM

Lol! I love that movie! "But why the rum?!"

But thanks Julianna, Bryan, and Emily. Glad you liked it.

-Zach

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