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Teen Poetry #9

Firey Fury

UNTAMEDelegance
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since 2009-05-30

Posts 222
Oregon

0 posted 2009-08-23 11:12 PM

A flash of fire, a spark of flame
the dark, sweet anger calls my name.

It begs, persuades my mind to fight
to stand for me and for my right.

To punch him hard and shove him down,
to push his face into the ground

And fill his spiteful mouth with mud
for every hurt, both mind and blood.

Behind his mask so sweet and painted
lies a devil sould so tainted.

He seeks to feed upon my pain
for mothing better; nothing gained.

Fire spreading, flame ignite
to fight his harm and show my might.

To make him sorry that he dared
to make me cry, and make me scared.

The anger at his viciousness;
the anger that he tried to mess

With me, my mind, my soul, my heart
and cleave my sanity apart.

Will always be a mystery
As why he lives to torture me.

precious pearls
Member

since 2009-07-24

Posts 110
NJ; United States

1 posted 2009-08-25 04:04 PM

There. Are. No. Words. I don't know what to say. Just... WOW, and times that wow by five hundred. Seriously!!! I mean, imagery was awesome, rhyming-great. The only thing is the grammar- for example- it's "soul", not "sould" lol
but other than that, absolutely wonderful

UNTAMEDelegance
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since 2009-05-30

Posts 222
Oregon

2 posted 2009-08-26 12:55 PM

Thank you so much precious pearls!=^.^=
~UNTAMEDelegance

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