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Teen Poetry #9

Get Out of My head!

UNTAMEDelegance
Member

since 2009-05-30

Posts 222
Oregon

0 posted 2009-08-21 12:39 PM

I hear them every day.
The voices in my head.

No.
I'm not crazy.
Not much.
These voices are different
than those ones.

These are the voices of
the past.
The voices of people
when I was young
and what they told me.

Scars
beaten on my soul
That I have to hide from the world.

They tell me
I'm not good enough.
Go away!

They tell me
that I'm worthless.
GO AWAY!

They tell me
that I'm hopeless
Get out of my head!

They tell me
That I'll never be strong.
Get out of my head!!

They tell me
that I'm not worth being loved.
GET OUT OF MY HEAD!!!

I feel the tears
on my face
as I shout the words out loud.

And as I sob
I realize
that the voices are gone;
they've vanished.
They're just gone.

Finally I can grow;
blossom
without the voices
to hinder me.
The scars of the past
have healed.

And the voices?
They got out of my head.

Ravagence
Member

since 2009-08-16

Posts 79

1 posted 2009-08-21 01:41 PM

That's very well written,shows that all we can do is move on, rebel against what people think when we know absolutly that they are wrong.
We can tell ourselves that they are wrong and wrong, over again. But what we really need to do is act upon it. Tell the real thing they are wrong, or forget them. But there will always be that echo, bouncing in your brain.

What you describe here is beautifully done, those "voices" are what give me headaches.
Only when I was in grade 7 did I get head aches. No one had ever told me that I looked like a loser, that I was a nerd, that I'm weak until grade 7. That's when I started poetry, it helped keep my mind off of those things. And your poem shows me that I'm not alone.

Thanks, Ravagence.

UNTAMEDelegance
Member

since 2009-05-30

Posts 222
Oregon

2 posted 2009-08-22 12:34 PM

Thanks Ravagence. It's nice to know that I'm not alone, as well. Keep fighting the voices!!!=^.^'=
~UNTAMEDelegance

crosscountry83
Member

since 2009-07-30

Posts 345

3 posted 2009-08-22 11:18 AM

I really like how your poem transitions from sadness to hope. Fine writing

Rileigh

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