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the_inner_me11
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since 2009-05-12
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0 posted 2009-07-16 11:45 PM


So I dont know how I feel about this one. Tell me what you think, please and thanks. =)


I look at you and my mind begins to wander.
I begin to think of us,
You and me,
Our history.
I think of the love and the hurt,
The good and the bad.
All we've been through,
And what's awaiting.
I think of how long this'll last,
Our time together I mean.
Til I have to make my departure,
Our last time together only a dream.
I think of how my heart will cry,
When I leave from by your side.
But then I think how it's worth it.
Being able to see the one I love,
The one I care most about,
The one that means the world to me.

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crosscountry83
Member
since 2009-07-30
Posts 345

1 posted 2009-07-30 04:14 PM


I like it, the poem flows nicely.  I also like that it's a little vague, it gives it charm.  Anyone can read it and relate to it good job!  
I'm having a hard time getting people to comment for me... If you have time to comment maybe...

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