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Zaineb
Junior Member

since 2009-05-22

Posts 27
Denmark

0 posted 2009-05-22 10:14 AM

This is my first on this site, i hope you like

please tell me how i can do it better

Alone

Whenever I felt alone
Whenever I wanted to cry
No one came to comfort me
I’m used to be alone
And don’t change it now
I don’t need comfort
Don’t change the good time
Let them be
Stop trying to make it all better
Because it’s not working
I’m all alone, but I’m happy
I am alone
And don’t change it.

Whenever I want to cry
Whenever I miss the good time
You try to help me out
But just leave me alone
I know you are trying to help
But it’s not working
The good times have gone
Just because you wanted them better
When things are going good
Learn to enjoy
Don’t try to change
When the times not right
I am alone
And I don’t need help
I am alone
And now I don’t even have the good times

Whenever I feel sad
And miss the good times
I start to think about how much better I was alone
When I see what you have done to me
I wish that I have no friends
I don’t want to be alone
I need to be alone
I need to be myself and stop worrying about you
It’s all was good
But you wished for more
Learn to enjoy
Or get out of my life
It’s hard to believe what you have done to me
I’ sick of others and their wishes
Now I want to be alone
And don’t you dare to change that.

moonbeam

Member Elite

since 2005-12-24

Posts 2356

1 posted 2009-05-22 11:25 AM

Welcome to Passions

It's great to see you posting here . I look forward to reading more of your poetry and your responses. Hopefully we can all learn and enjoy together. (Please check your e-mail for a special greeting).

All the best.

Rob - Moderator/Passions in Poetry

freeand2sexy
Senior Member

since 2008-09-12

Posts 704
CA, USA

2 posted 2009-05-22 08:03 PM

Welcome to Pip!!!

Nice write!

The tips of my fingers
Start to bleed the thoughts
That overwhelm me

Zaineb
Junior Member

since 2009-05-22

Posts 27
Denmark

3 posted 2009-05-23 03:06 AM

thank you

nehematala
Member

since 2009-05-21

Posts 129

4 posted 2009-05-31 03:41 PM

good poem

If you don't like something,
Change it...
If you can't change it,
Change the way you think about it

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