Teen Poetry #9 |
Virginity, Life, Busted Bones and Bruises (Nicoles Poem) |
RevengeIsMine Senior Member
since 2006-07-08
Posts 820Australia |
I'm not sure if this post pushes guidelines here..And i'm sorry if it does. but i'm not sorry for writing it.. So many kids are in situation simlar if not the same as this one and the ones that aren't are the people like me, the guys or girls picking up the broken hearts left behind by the people who say anything to get exactly what they want. This poem is for nicole.. my friend, the girl i could have saved from the bragging rights of a teenage boy that i'm sincerly ashamed to call my brother. ________________________________________________ For all the words i wished i said For all the times i shook my head For all the days i've watched you hurt When He Treated You Like Dirt For all the hearts i've watched him break For all the scar's he's yet to make For all dreams that i've watched die Everytime he made you cry... For all the years that i've let pass For all the sorry's that never last For all the hopes that i once had When he promised not to make you sad For all the love you had in him For all the the times he made you sin For all the words i have to say I'm sorry that it turned out this way For all the busted bones you've seen For all the bruises he didn't mean For the viginity that you let him take For Your heart that i watched him break But this rhyme it's just not good enough He's left you drowing out at sea Exhausted, Tired, Broken By the boy he'll always be |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
"Sin" and "way" don't rhyme hon. lol I love the last stanza. Very very good. I hope Nicole is doing better.. -Zach I love my crayons. :D lol |
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Rosie_Orange Junior Member
since 2009-04-20
Posts 46South Africa |
wow... its so honest! normally i don't really like rhyming poems but yours is really poignant and truthful... it feels like i'm experiencing it! well done i love it! |
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XxForever.BrokenxX Senior Member
since 2008-01-20
Posts 891Neverland |
Jess you never seem to disappoint me. You always write amazing poetry. Love you hun, {~~*~~} Lacrimosa Dies Illa |
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JenniferMaxwell
since 2006-09-14
Posts 2423 |
It's so painful to watch those we care about make mistakes that hurt themselves and others. A very poignant and well written poem! |
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Kalysta Junior Member
since 2009-04-02
Posts 41Ohio |
Its a really sad poem for sure, but extrememly good. I can totally relate to it. I hope Nicole moves on. It will take time though, it took me almost a year. Best of luck, ~Kalysta~ ~Kalysta~ |
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HersheyKiss Member
since 2008-06-02
Posts 137New Jersey |
JESSSS!!!! Amazing poem as usual. Hope things are going better. ~DANI~ |
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nehematala Member
since 2009-05-21
Posts 129 |
This is an amazing poem. sad but true If you don't like something, |
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