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On The Forest Floor
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On The Forest Floor |
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Just.Another.Falling.Star Member
since 2008-05-08
Posts 422Canada 
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Through the trees she cries quietly as the world crashes down on her. Everything she’s ever learned, has turned out to be the lie of all lies. People abandoned her, she's left by herslef. No one to save her, she'll die there alone. I see her scream in the horror that she's in. It looks as though she's given up, please I hope she hasn't. That's not what she wants to do, I can see it in her eyes. But she see's no other way out, so soon she'll make her decision. Deeper and deeper into the ground she sinks. Harder and harder, she's dying now her death. .:~]Julianna[~:. |
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prettypinkrebel Member
since 2007-11-07
Posts 104 |
this is really a good write i like it and can totally identify with the peice of work. thanks you keep it up. library |
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Just.Another.Falling.Star Member
since 2008-05-08
Posts 422Canada |
thanks! glad you liked it! it was something i wrote in like...5 minutes at school when my homework wasn't working, so to me its not my greatest, but yeah, thanks! .:~]Julianna[~:. |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
Not your greatest??? Pfft! Whatever!!! This was pretty good I think! -Zach When I see your smile, and I know it’s not for me, that’s when I’ll miss you. |
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Just.Another.Falling.Star Member
since 2008-05-08
Posts 422Canada |
well thank you zach. i'm glad you liked it, lol. ?ul!@nn@ |
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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed Senior Member
since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062In Love <3 |
I really liked this, it was a good piece by you. -Kate ps library good. "Lucy: I think you are the most selfish person on the planet. George: Well that's just silly. Have you met everyone on the planet?" |
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Just.Another.Falling.Star Member
since 2008-05-08
Posts 422Canada |
thanks kate! i'm surprised people like this one, lol. i don't...haha. ?ul!@nn@ |
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RevengeIsMine Senior Member
since 2006-07-08
Posts 820Australia |
Well Well here we are.. me commenting on one of ur poems for the first time in ages.. I've been so busy i've read n not commented so now i get a super long sappy comment.. not that theirs much to say... Love this poem.. it's prob one of ur best in a while... Your writing is developing each time i read ur work which is really great.. Soooo with all that said and done i have one last thing.. *Gosh Your Pretty*!! (lol) xx |
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Just.Another.Falling.Star Member
since 2008-05-08
Posts 422Canada |
haha, aww!!! thanks so much!!! for both the poem "critique" and the compliment on my picture, lol. i'm really glad that you liked it!!! (both, lol) ?ul!@nn@ |
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