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Visible to the Blind (Free-Write)
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Visible to the Blind (Free-Write) |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois 
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Okay so its 6 in the morning here and I felt like writing. So this is practically words flowing out of my head trying to write something that doesn't make sense... Visible to the Blind Broken, chapped lips call for help Blood shot eyes scream for sanity Caught within the stories I write Chocking on every guilt I bear Responsibilities to for-fill Lost within heavy thoughts Each killing, tearing at my shell Leaving my heart; drained empty Fake smiles worn to no end Happiness at my door Sitting within my doubt The pain only visible to the blind |
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GothicCherry Member
since 2008-09-16
Posts 471TN |
NICE!! Free-writes work for you.  |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
Thanks Michaela! I really liked my title. But to me the whole poem doesn't have like a story but eh, whatever. I'll get over it. -Zach When I see your smile, and I know it’s not for me, that’s when I’ll miss you. |
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freeand2sexy Senior Member
since 2008-09-12
Posts 704CA, USA |
Wow, I love your title and your poem too. I liked the 1st stanza the best Jesus loves you! Don't believe it? Then at least believe that I love you! I may not know you, but you're a person too, and you deserve to be loved. |
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Dark Star Member
since 2008-02-20
Posts 392Lost in your eyes |
free style is always the more diverse one, i believe, nicely done Lana xoxoxo |
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