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NicoleRocker12367
Junior Member

since 2009-01-07

Posts 12
MA, United States

0 posted 2009-01-07 09:24 PM

A overwhelming feeling
washes over me
just at the sight of you
my heart yearns for you

I stare at you
And see a halo surrounding you
an angelic look indeed

No one knows why
I love you
But I shall never tell
a secret not even you know

They call this feeling a crush
They say it will pass
but I can not beleive
how this could dissapear

A tale of Shakespeare
Is what I call it
Love beyond imaginable
but you do not share
this love I have for you

You are my Romeo
a person who I love
but not sharing it
I guess you are my crush

gdcod2player
Member

since 2008-07-26

Posts 117

1 posted 2009-01-07 10:24 PM

wow that was what i have been needing to read
amazing
lots of emotion

notadaygoesby
New Member

since 2009-01-14

Posts 4

2 posted 2009-01-14 11:52 PM

wow i feel the exact same way except the im a guy

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

3 posted 2009-01-15 06:24 PM

Welcome To PIP I haven't seen u around these days.. First Off... Loved your poem... reminds me of loving an older boy, older man, teacher even.. but thats just me... Anyhow.. Welcome.. hope too be reading more

Just.Another.Falling.Star
Member

since 2008-05-08

Posts 422
Canada

4 posted 2009-01-16 09:27 AM

this was a really great write from you. this is the first thing i've read from you and i liked it alot. i went through this for a year now, and it ended horribly...but i hope yours turns out amazing and happy

just one point of critique...in the first stanza, 1st line, where you have "A overwhelming..." it should be "An overwhelming" because of the grammer thing.
but other than that i totally loved it!!!
library.

?ul!@nn@

these broken pieces of my heart are to shattered to be put back together again

Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

5 posted 2009-01-16 06:07 PM

Pretty cool poem. Free style poems aren't my type of thing but you pull it off pretty well. Welcome to Pip! Glad to have you here to share some of your work!

-Zach

When I see your smile, and I know it’s not for me, that’s when I’ll miss you.

wwzwlmd8
Member

since 2006-09-23

Posts 96
San Diego,CA

6 posted 2009-01-17 07:10 PM

this poem is how i use to feel about someone i loved.

~Indya

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