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Teen Poetry #9

Desperate

stacylynn418
Junior Member

since 2009-03-06

Posts 40
new york

0 posted 2009-03-14 02:20 PM

She clings to every word he ever said
And any thoughts he shares,
Hoping she might find a clue
That, in secrecy, he cares.

She refuses to accept as truth
That a love so fierce could die.
If he loved her then, won’t the love her now?
She will never say goodbye.

He speaks of days they used to share,
As if they’re distant past.
She holds these reminiscences close,
Hoping they won’t really be the last.

She does not have a plan,
Nor does she know how this could work,
But she’s clutching to it desperately,
Just waiting to get hurt.

fromme2U
Member

since 2007-11-09

Posts 257

1 posted 2009-03-14 02:47 PM

This was nice!

isabella223
Junior Member

since 2009-03-14

Posts 16

2 posted 2009-03-14 05:47 PM

i really like the last stanza.

freeand2sexy
Senior Member

since 2008-09-12

Posts 704
CA, USA

3 posted 2009-03-14 08:28 PM

I like the last stanza too!

I really enjoyed reading this!

No, I'm not conceited, 2sexy doesn't mean "too sexy", it means something else!

GothicCherry
Member

since 2008-09-16

Posts 471
TN

4 posted 2009-03-15 05:49 PM

I liked this..

Hmmm, I think the first line would sound better if worded a tad bit differently. Just my opinion.

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