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Can this be Real
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Can this be Real |
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prettypinkrebel Member
since 2007-11-07
Posts 104 |
Can this be real? This emotion that has come so soon? Can I really say i love you? My friends keep telling me that time will tell all but the longer I wait the harder I fall You rescued me from a heartbreak that tore me apart And slowly you began to help in mending my heart.. I dont know if i want to tell you how i feel because i dont know where you would go And I need you so Your healing my heart and this pain that i feel the only question is can this be real? |
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GothicCherry Member
since 2008-09-16
Posts 471TN |
Ok, is the last line saying it's not real and you're wanting it to be? It completely threw me off. |
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prettypinkrebel Member
since 2007-11-07
Posts 104 |
oh lol... sorry typo. thats suppose to be can!! |
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GothicCherry Member
since 2008-09-16
Posts 471TN |
Oh alright!  I probably should have got that myself. Hehe...Best of wishes! |
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freeand2sexy Senior Member
since 2008-09-12
Posts 704CA, USA |
I like this, but again your missing punctuation in certain places. Punctuation is very important; it effects how the poem is read by the reader. With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life. |
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