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Teen Poetry #9

Just Look (you plus me)

freeand2sexy
Senior Member

since 2008-09-12

Posts 704
CA, USA

0 posted 2009-03-10 05:21 PM

Omg, I was looking at my old poetry notebooks, and reading my old poems and wow, they were so horrible, it's so funny because I remember when I thought they were so good, well maybe they were for my age. I just wanted to share one with you guys. It's nothing much really, just a bunch of repition. Oh and no critiques please, you could tell me everthing that's wrong, but I won't change a single word.

Just look and you'll see,
It's you plus me.
It could last forever
Or just a week,
But just look
You'll see,
That it's still
You plus me.
Just look and you'll see
What I feel about you.
Just look,
Just see,
Look at what you feel,
About me.
Just look and you'll see
It's still you plus me.
Just look,
We're still together
And it could last forever,
If only you,
Would just look at me.

With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life.