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A Conscious Mind
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A Conscious Mind |
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Reborn_Phoenix Junior Member
since 2009-03-04
Posts 11 |
The drum continues to beat down upon my head, but then I burst into several shards of glass. The floor is now a mirror that only reflects one same face covered by several sets of masks. Now each one of the masks glares right at me, as if condemning the lie that had created them. I then shatter the guilt with a stomp of my heel, causing the masks to shriek and take a new form. Fire erupts where the shards of glass once laid, and a white shroud arises to blind my sight. In the smoke I see a figure slowly approaching, and as it comes closer the heat consumes me. Finally the guilt disappears, but so do I. [This message has been edited by Reborn_Phoenix (03-04-2009 02:35 AM).] |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
wow. welcome to pip  this is a fantastic write, what a great first post! Really like the reference to the masks... *please check your email for a special greeting!  |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
Wow. I agree. Very good first post! Love your imagery in this. Welcome to pip -Zach When I see your smile, and I know it’s not for me, that’s when I’ll miss you. |
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Reborn_Phoenix Junior Member
since 2009-03-04
Posts 11 |
Thank you both for the welcome, and for the comments on my poem. And thank you SEA for the greeting card as well. The design fits the poem perfectly. |
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GothicCherry Member
since 2008-09-16
Posts 471TN |
Nice imagery. I enjoyed this. |
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freeand2sexy Senior Member
since 2008-09-12
Posts 704CA, USA |
I absolutely love this, and the imagery is amazing as well. With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life. |
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