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A Descending Interest In Gravity
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A Descending Interest In Gravity |
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Octave Member
since 2008-07-29
Posts 186Highlands, Scotland. |
Peculiar. Possibly a song. A Descending Interest In Gravity We will fall through a hole Made in the sky for us We’ll fall through everything Just because we must We’ll take a slice of fear And we’ll chew it as we fall Flailing through air Ignoring every call So I’ll hold onto you Just don’t you hold onto me As we race against gravity In bitter symphony Falling, falling, falling Tearing up the sky Taste the wind in our mouths We don’t even have to try So I’ll hold onto you Just don’t you hold onto me As we race against gravity In bitter symphony No wings to break our fall Shredding atmosphere We’re eating up the space Swallow non-existent fear And we will fall together Falling through the sky Carefree and delicious We don’t want to fly So I’ll hold onto you Just don’t you hold onto me As we race against gravity In bitter symphony Falling, falling, falling Don’t hold onto me We will fall together In bitter symphony |
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moonbeam
since 2005-12-24
Posts 2356 |
This has the flavour of a villanelle. Why not try and make it one?  |
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Octave Member
since 2008-07-29
Posts 186Highlands, Scotland. |
Dont want to sound stupid, but what is that? |
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moonbeam
since 2005-12-24
Posts 2356 |
Don't worry, you sound far from stupid. It's a very difficult poetic form. I'm hoping Christine will have a shot at one soon, .Here: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Villanelle Check out two famous ones: Dylan Thomas's "Do Not Go Gentle into that Good Night", and Elizabeth Bishop's "One Art" |
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GothicCherry Member
since 2008-09-16
Posts 471TN |
Oooh, this is pretty. I like it. |
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