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Leaf bud
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freeand2sexy Senior Member
since 2008-09-12
Posts 704CA, USA |
Haha, this is what comes out of my butt, when I have writer’s block, it’s horrible. A tiny leaf bud had fell beside me So pretty, nice-looking thing I had thought Its was almost plain,but there was more there Though soon to die life shined through a lot With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life. |
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GothicCherry Member
since 2008-09-16
Posts 471TN |
Hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm.......What to say what to say......... |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
My thoughts exactly Michaela!! xD I really don't know what to say Christine.. lol -Zach When I see your smile, and I know it’s not for me, that’s when I’ll miss you. |
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freeand2sexy Senior Member
since 2008-09-12
Posts 704CA, USA |
yup, yup, yup! well what do i expect. lol With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life. |
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GothicCherry Member
since 2008-09-16
Posts 471TN |
Poem Farts!!! Lol... I doubt anyone would EVER expect that from me...Lol... |
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freeand2sexy Senior Member
since 2008-09-12
Posts 704CA, USA |
Haha, too funny, I love poem farts. With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life. |
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GothicCherry Member
since 2008-09-16
Posts 471TN |
Poem farts give me wings!! Lol jk jk We need to be de-hypered lol |
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freeand2sexy Senior Member
since 2008-09-12
Posts 704CA, USA |
no i like my hyper me, but maybe i should be a lil de-hypered lol With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life. |
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GothicCherry Member
since 2008-09-16
Posts 471TN |
HA! Well, I'll enjoy this why I can before I get depressed again over that poem I did terribly on. |
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freeand2sexy Senior Member
since 2008-09-12
Posts 704CA, USA |
yeah, i'm trying to enjoy this too, sadness hit me this week and i dnt think its done yet, i hope i have more poem farts, lol! With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life. |
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moonbeam
since 2005-12-24
Posts 2356 |
Christine! I am not sure you really want to hear what I think about this gem (splutter). I can be pretty, umm, caustic yanno when I want to be. |
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freeand2sexy Senior Member
since 2008-09-12
Posts 704CA, USA |
Hey go right ahead if you have time to waste, i like knowing everyone's opinion, but if you have no time, then you should hold off on your causticness for something else. With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life. |
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moonbeam
since 2005-12-24
Posts 2356 |
Lol Christine, it doesn't take me long to tell you what you already know, which is that this is so excruciatingly ungrammatical as to be almost unreadable. Whatever poetry you write, whether light and funny or dark and serious, you should at least make sure your grammar is ok. In fact on second thoughts after reading again, it's not just the grammar, the syntax is weird in places, and, well, it reads as borderline nonsense. |
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freeand2sexy Senior Member
since 2008-09-12
Posts 704CA, USA |
My butt knows no grammer nor syntax, I forgot to teach it that, but I'll put it on my to do list. With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life. |
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moonbeam
since 2005-12-24
Posts 2356 |
 good idea Christine |
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GothicCherry Member
since 2008-09-16
Posts 471TN |
I don't think I taught much grammer to mine either...I'll get on that... |
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