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maddorani
Member

since 2007-11-18

Posts 423
houston,tx

0 posted 2011-03-12 02:45 PM

my feelings for you
are piling up
each and everyday
just like the
pure white snow
my heart
is becoming
ponderous
and oppressed
just like the
blizzard
my heart
has become
frigid like
ice
there is no
one to thaw it
there is no fire to
melt it
even my
tears
are starting
to freeze
it seems like
i'm in
some kind
of blizzard
walking and
walking
until
my feet
start
to feel
cold
becoming
bruised
and numb
then
my face
starts to
feel cold
it seems like
i'm starting
to hallucinate
about you
because my
feelings
for you are
so strong
that i can't
get rid of them
its piercing
my heart
from the inside
thinking
why my feelings
for you are
piling up
thinking
why they are
becoming ponderous
and oppressed
why my feelings
for you are like
the snow
cold and
useless
since you don't
care about me
that much

XGarapanX
Senior Member

since 2008-06-19

Posts 1435
Antarctica

1 posted 2011-03-22 08:58 PM

A very expressive piece. Wonderful work. Very heartfelt.

·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!"

maddorani
Member

since 2007-11-18

Posts 423
houston,tx

2 posted 2011-03-23 06:41 PM

thank you

XGarapanX
Senior Member

since 2008-06-19

Posts 1435
Antarctica

3 posted 2011-03-24 03:12 PM

·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!"

maddorani
Member

since 2007-11-18

Posts 423
houston,tx

4 posted 2011-03-25 02:50 AM

would you like to read a poem in my language with the poem i will type the translation with it

XGarapanX
Senior Member

since 2008-06-19

Posts 1435
Antarctica

5 posted 2011-03-25 12:00 PM

I would love to, yes, please. In fact, if you wish to post it that's great but to be sure I see it I invite you to mail it to me directly- [email protected] This way, too, I can take my time in viewing and rendering my own translation of it to grasp every nuance. Thank you so much! I look forward to your poem.

(It is only because I came in here for an additional reading that I saw your invitation. Piptalk doesn't notify people of responses to comments unless you are the original poster. So again, please feel free to email such generous offers directly because I consider your poetry to be top notch and am glad to gain more insight into anything you may wish to share!)

·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!"

maddorani
Member

since 2007-11-18

Posts 423
houston,tx

6 posted 2011-03-25 03:32 PM

ok i will email the poem to you but are u sure u dont want me to translate it well if you say so hehe and the poem is coming to u shortly

maddorani
Member

since 2007-11-18

Posts 423
houston,tx

7 posted 2011-03-25 03:55 PM

and also tel me what you think of the urdu poem in the email

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