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Days to Come
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Days to Come |
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Joshkt Junior Member
since 2011-02-09
Posts 12 |
Thinkin Bout the days to come and what you got left in your soul tell yourself its different everyones exuberant except for you and me my love We wont always see the same Everything is different I wish I never sent that note That sailed away on a paper boat then sunk to the bottom of your heart We never really got to smart but thinking bout the days to come see what we made different who knows what they really meant on that secret mission to our brain I think we're all insane cause we never feel that much pain like the birds and the bees in the trees We get so we weak in our knees and never begging for you please Cause I dont care if your back again climbing out on a different limb Swinging into the daylight who cares what they really think we live our lives in a single blink Closing in on the brink Hopefully our hearts wont sink Maybe you just need a drink to get your mind off this world I dont know if your bored or if you just nee some love a hug, a kiss, a snugg, a tug We're all just tiny little bugs crawling all over the place Trying to reach home base Everything we've ever done will not matter in the days to come When we go for that drum People may think were really dumb we live our lives like silly kids trying just to keep it real Our worlds like a banana peel coming off one bit at time chaos all around us but we dont really have the time to look around us and whine we just want to live our lives without a care in the world Dancing all over the floor I dont know where is the door were not done here just yet we have a new adventure to start I hope our lives dont part Like a rail road track switch look at that silly witch making up fake tales Lifes just like the mail dont whats gonna find us if were gonna take the next bus move on to something else cause we just cant stand ourselves man I cant wait for the days to come |
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madelyn Member
since 2009-09-03
Posts 172Purgatory |
I really enjoyed reading this poem. Constructive Crit: If you break up your poem into stanza's it might make it easier/more inviting to read. But, on the whole, it was an excellent poem. M "If I am an angel paint me with black wings"-Anne Rice |
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HolsJoscelyne Junior Member
since 2011-04-05
Posts 23Colchester, United Kingdom |
Brilliant and yes I'd echo what 'M' before me said! But wow I loved it x Holly Joscelyne poetry at dougthedreadpoetry.blogspot.com |
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