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KatVern17 Junior Member
since 2009-05-07
Posts 33 |
Notes ring in my ears sweetly moving from one note to another sound is so soft no harm The keys moving together making sweet melodies Kids sing high and low and in between Matching the pitch It sounds wonderfully put together singing and playing and singing The piano is so innocent Listening to the wonders that are done by the piano He moves his fingers making it up as he goes along The words he tries the song that will be famous Playing for the fun playing for him the words the notes Its nothing you herd before It's the wonder of music |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
This is sublime, and the line with the innocent piano just rocked. It reached out and took my mind on a ride that beautifully complimented the apex of this tale at just the right moment. Awesome write. ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!" |
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KatVern17 Junior Member
since 2009-05-07
Posts 33 |
Thank you. I wrote this while in vocal class, waiting for my teacher to call me to work on my vocal pieces. |
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HopelessRomantic101 Junior Member
since 2011-02-09
Posts 10Georgia, United States of America |
Not to be hypercritical, but... 1. *heard, not herd 2. The fact that the pianist isn't mentioned at all before "he" really bothers me--pronoun/antecedent 3. It's pretty :P |
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KatVern17 Junior Member
since 2009-05-07
Posts 33 |
Hopeless- It's supposed to be that way. The reason "he" isn't talked bout earlier is because as author I wanted it to be that you are just listening to the piano and then you focus to the one who is playing and you realize dreams can happen. *my exbf used to play so I used him instead of my teacher who really was playing the piano during class. |
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