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Teen Poetry #9

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Just.Another.Falling.Star
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since 2008-05-08

Posts 422
Canada

0 posted 2011-01-18 08:55 AM

For my writers group, theme this week was: animals.

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You can have me now. All that I am, all that I've grown up to be has fallen to the ground. The passion I once had was snuffed out long ago and my heart is slowly sinking. My flesh...my flesh longs for a warmth, but it's nothing you can give me. Everything that you possess is crumbling too. You're all that you can give, and that's fine. We'll crumble together...and warm the animals with our flesh.

julianna

"Many of the most significant moments in our lives come not because it all went right, but because it all fell apart." - Rob Bell

XGarapanX
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since 2008-06-19

Posts 1435
Antarctica

1 posted 2011-01-18 06:10 PM

Dark(ish) and very eloquent. Totally awesome write.

·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!"

Just.Another.Falling.Star
Member

since 2008-05-08

Posts 422
Canada

2 posted 2011-01-18 06:16 PM

Thank you very much.
I like writing dark things

It brings emotions forward.

julianna

"Many of the most significant moments in our lives come not because it all went right, but because it all fell apart." - Rob Bell

XGarapanX
Senior Member

since 2008-06-19

Posts 1435
Antarctica

3 posted 2011-01-18 11:46 PM

Yes, it does indeed, Poetess. Some of my own more expressive pieces are dark. I like (tasteful)dark poetry very much myself. It brings out a rawness that cannot otherwise be captured, so I think.

·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!"

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